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    dots Submission Name: Forgonedots
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    Author: deathbelow
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 34/43/17
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       I'm not sure about this one I wrote it a long time ago but I know it has to do with my struggles everyday...Haven't we a ll just wanted to be escape, to be alone, just to breath...end all the pain...Thats how I was feeling


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    dotsForgonedots
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    This whole world is just spinning
    Who's to say who loses and who's winning?
    Nothing concrete anymore
    What's this life worth living for
    If everyday is just spent living sorrows and regret,
    Eachday passes by,
    Just another moment wasted
    Distant cry
    Shut everything out from my view
    My heart stops beating right on cue
    I can't let this get to me
    For my sanity, I do plea
    It drives me crazy that I cannot stop
    Your dismay I cannot block
    I drown my agony in a place of silence,
    In a place of self reliance
    Wishing just to be alone
    Everyone, everything forgone
    If I could just forget
    That would be a perfect world I would live in it
    But as I drift away
    I remember I have to wake up someday
    This thing I wish too hard for
    Just makes me want it so much more
    too bad there is no pause for life
    Because if there was, there'd be happiness in sight
    Damn this wretched place
    That puts this tear on my face
    For if I was alone everyone, everything would be forgone




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