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Stained Glass


Author: Malcolm Bishop
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Words: 39
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Feeling blue...but who doesn't from time to time?


Stained Glass



An escalator of light travels down,
through the glass.

Each piece of pigment changes,
doesn't last.

A whole made of parts,
one may not stand alone.

Fragility encased in surety,
who shall cast the first stone?




Submitted on 2005-07-09 16:42:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow this was awesome...really makes you think and with so little words, it is really powerful which is hard to do now cause every thing has already been done usually...but this stands out.Nice one man.


~Jaz~
| Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
  Again, really strong language and use of imagry. You have something very special to say in a lot of work, and that comes across, your work feels impressive, and I like that.
However, I'd say again you're limited by your rhyme scheme. I don't think pairs of rhymed lines (or in this case, rhymed stanzas) can really work any more. It's kinda been done to death.
I'd suggest giving an alternating rhyme scheme a go at some point in the future, try writing ABAB instead of AABB, it's a little fresher while at the same time being really easier to write, probably easier than writing in couplets in fact
| Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by shatteredroses | [ Reply to This ]
  Life.. we're all in this together.. each with our own frailties and unique style... yet in this ever changing world, we need each other.. to make us whole.. to help us feel complete.
Though our happiness cannot "solely" depend on another.. it sure helps to have someone (or others) to share our mind and soul with.
I'm not sure why I got all of the above from this poem.. but that's what came to me while reading it.
Another intriquing read from you.
Take care!
~Sandra
| Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Okay Malcolm, man of many words. I've been thinking about this one. I actually like it. The more I read it, the more I view it as looking through a kaleidescope. The light travels through the glass and the colors constantly change. Together the pieces make a mosaic of color encased together. But if one piece is missing, the entire masterpiece shatters. It is like love, constantly changing, yet constantly being held together. Until...
Carol
| Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
  interesting that wannabe thought of the view through the kaleidescope here. i wonder if you have worked in the field of colour,optics and light refraction and this is why you are able to use the properties of them to such good effect? i like the link between the visible spectrum through the glass with the throwing of a stone idea. thus shattering both the glass and destroying the rainbow of colours. and 'stained ' can mean more than just coloured if we wish it so. you may mean something completely different but it does not matter, since there is enough here for all of us to take from it what we need to think and be moved. so you have achieved a lot with these lines... which is what poetry is all about. Cheers.
| Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a rich small poem.

With a bit of a "holy" image.
The tainted glass is usually seen in churches.

This piece may actually mean more than just feeling blue.
Athough I understand how it can go in that direction, being that every piece of colored glass is a feeling going through ur mind. The stone represents what will break the pattern of these feelings.

Back to my other vision - the holy one- It is a bit as if what u say is a speech and that u have a mission.
No matter how colored u r (ppl) stick together, accept each other because in unity we stand.
And the stone that will break us is the one of intolerence.

Good write
Peace

Viviane
| Posted on 2005-08-31 00:00:00 | by babyblue002 | [ Reply to This ]


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