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    dots Submission Name: Bird of Perfect White Silencedots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 654
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    Description:
       This was in response to a friend who painted abstract expressionist images with grand titles that meant nothing. He admitted that the catalyst was/wasn't the subject, and his purpose in some cases was only messing with the viewers mind. This was one of the pieces.


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    dots Bird of Perfect White Silencedots
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    I envisioned a white plain
    And a cable of red and blue
    Twined down the middle
    A subtle horizon
    In no real landscape

    I thought I saw a gallery
    And imagined people
    Wandering
    What can it mean?
    What had he said?
    The colors seem
    So striking such
    An odd command
    Of blue and red
    Such elegance
    They said

    I saw myself
    In the shadow there
    Wondering at the crowd
    And as each of them
    Compared the image
    To itself
    My thoughts
    Were drawn to you
    And then to no one else

    I dream what others
    Seldom speak
    I see
    Although I never seek




    Submitted on 2005-07-09 17:27:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really good.The flow is perfect. It is short and sweet and gets to the point. If i interpreted it right you were looking at beauty then saw someone and began to fall in love?! Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-07-09 00:00:00 | by Starry Eyes | [ Reply to This ]


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