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    dots Submission Name: Poison Fingertipsdots
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    Author: xvacantxskiesx
    ASL Info:    19
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 27/36/11
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       i had just found out that my boyfriend slept with his ex-girlfriend, and i really didnt think they had...so i was really pissed off and wrote this.


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    dotsPoison Fingertipsdots
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    Dont touch me ever again.
    Your flesh has been infected,
    tainted with her poison fingertips.

    You used to be all I yearned for.
    Now you're all I'm haunted by:
    Images of the two of you
    wrapped together in arms,
    laced and tangled like medieval statues.

    I will scream until I spew blood,
    ridding myself of this burden.
    My lips will contort and disfigure themselves.
    My throat will blaze with agony
    as my eyes ignite with envy
    and my body will ache as I crumble.

    The poison from her fingertips
    has infested not only your flesh
    but the depths of your soul.
    And when my eyes discovered your heart
    they, too, were touched by the poison.

    She will infect masses of lovers
    until they all turn toxic.
    They will scream at the black palate of stars
    and spew blood until their clothing is speckled red.

    Lover I'm terribly sorry.
    But you mustn't ever touch me again.
    I'd rather wither away from heartbreak
    than know she is destroying me:
    executing me until I lay in a smoldering heap of ashes.




    Submitted on 2005-07-09 23:37:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That was...incredible.
    I've always thought that if my husband ever cheated, I wouldn't be able to handle him touching me ever again. This piece just put all of that into words. Fantastic.
    I am very sorry you had to go thru the situation, and I hope it gets better for you. If he cheated, he doesn't deserve you anyway.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      OK- I have sat here for two minutes trying to put the emotions this piece has cause into words. The depths of hurt, scorn, rage, ire....WOW! I have a thousand words of praise for this, but the ability to type them has flown away for the moment. I hope all your work is this intense.

    I think I'm going to have to take this one with me...
    Take Care!
    -Chell-
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      Man that was powerful ... I can actually feel your pain you know...I think everyone who has been cheated on feels this way but can't put it into words.great write
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by pandora22 | [ Reply to This ]
      I get an immense sense of betrayal coupled with a clean break from the offending party. Maybe he has or will try to return to you, but it seems the die is cast and the relationship is dead. Stunning.
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow that's real deep. I'm not sure if i get what you really mean or not but, i can get the feeling that this person hurt you because of the other female. It give off the emotions most people feel after they've been cheated on.
    Well thanx for the great read.
    | Posted on 2005-07-09 00:00:00 | by Raye | [ Reply to This ]


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