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    dots Submission Name: The Days Of You and Idots
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    Author: manderz_1207
    ASL Info:    15/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    5.45 - 95/109/38
    Words: 542
    Class/Type: Personal Quotes/Passion
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    Description:
       Well, This started out about the day we were together. My ex-boyfriend and I. I slowly turned it into a poem. So it's half short story half poem. Hope you enjoy.


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    dotsThe Days Of You and Idots
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    I sit in front of you, face to face. As silence begins to fill the room. I think to myself, what is he thinking? Am I the one on his mind? Or is it someone else?

    The silence is broken, "A penny for your thoughts?" He says. "I don't know," I reply. Yet I'm screaming inside, " I DO, I DO KNOW!" I finally tell him, "I'm thinking... I'm really happy right now, being here with you."

    "A penny for yours?" I say. "How do you put a price on your thoughts?" He says. Damnit! He's right, how do you put a price on them. Godsh, I feel like such a fool now.

    That was part of what I was thinking though. He's so smart, he always knows just what to say and when to say it. Then I begin to think to myself. Maybe theres a reason why he doesn't want to tell me what he's thinking. Maybe it's a bad reason.

    I begin to space off as I worry and imagine what he's thinking and why he won't tell me. I look at him, as he looks at me. For some reason all my worries are washed away. I trust him, theres nothing to worry about. Everything else becomes blurry and all I picture is him and I.

    I see us together, together forever. Even though I know that more than likely that will not happen. I have to live right now, take the time to appreciate what I have. What I have right now is him. I have him to be by my side. I don't want to lose that.

    The days go by, I feel him fading away from me. There aren't those loving, comfy days where we just sit and cuddle while we watch our movies. I know that somethings wrong. I try to talk myself out of it. I try to tell myself that, even though I haven't seen him in a while, everythings going to be alright.

    Then the night comes. Lone behold, just as I suspected I hear those words. The words I've been dreading forever. The conversation I've worried about since that first day.

    It was over. My heart broke, it sunk so deep that I could not save it for anything. I want him to be happy. I sit day after day and tell myself, this is what he wants, this is what makes him happy. I want him to be happy, I keep telling myself but my heart doesn't believe me. It ignores me. I nostalgia for him, I want him back in my visions with me. Not far away with different feelings from me.

    I have an infatuation for him. I long for him. I try to tell myself not to but my heart won't listen. Now I wait and wait some more. I wait for the day when I meet that someone new and my heart is able to move on. I love him, I do. I always will and I hope he knows. I hope he knows that forever and always there'll always be him in my heart, in his own special place.




    Submitted on 2005-07-09 23:51:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can tell from this that your a very compassionate person, when he breaks your heart you want him to happy, you don't show any signs of being mad at him, you just want him to be happy...Yet I'm screaming inside, " I DO, I DO KNOW!" I like how you put this in, I know I think a lot of things in my head but don't say them aloud, and I can't even write them down properly, so I admire how you can do that. As time goes on that special place for him in your heart will fade, but still a faint glimmer of the love that once was will still be there. Good job!
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by MurphyGirl44 | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa, are you spying on me? This sounds so right. I think it's very pretty... unconventional, but honest, poignant, striking. I admire you for throwing it out there.
    | Posted on 2005-07-11 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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