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    dots Submission Name: 1 Trip of a Day!dots
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    Author: Tarek Refaat
    ASL Info:    24/m/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 370/508/212
    Words: 387
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 185
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    dots1 Trip of a Day!dots
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    1 Trip of a Day!

    It all started of as a beautiful day
    Still getting ready to go the way
    To spend a day at least for me
    The rest were spending a couple more

    All ready?
    Set and go!
    And of To the place
    Here we go..

    A while later
    Crash boom and bang!
    A car broke down!
    Our friend’s car
    Just slowed down.
    Stopped and they came down to check
    And so did we and what a mess!

    Exchanges went on to our car
    Back on the road here we are!

    Finally the resort here at last
    But the joy wasn’t there to last!!
    The rooms aren’t the ones we had in mind!
    And then I dropped sick and lost my mind!
    I’m supposed to stay one freaking day!
    And even so it was grey!
    Dizzy and feverish its how I’ve been!!
    And in my eyes it can all be seen!!
    Add to this my new pair of sneakers
    Which I had recently got..
    The zipper of one of them
    Just got stuck!!
    What the hell is this sort of Day?
    Well thank you God
    Anyway
    You know I’ll accept and just go on
    And hope tomorrow will be better along!
    Finally I recover at midnight time..
    No swimming no fun nothing at all..

    Finally I ate and what feeling it was.. And went to bed
    Couldn’t sleep that much!
    Next day the sun was beautiful
    And the water was even more wonderful
    Splash in the water here I go
    A few seconds later
    Ouch and here I go !
    I cut my toe !!
    Just great don’t you think!!
    And I’d think to myself
    Well isn’t life just PINK!!!

    Although all this I took a swim for a while..
    And now its time to go back to Cairo
    Back to home!
    One bus passes and no sir!
    Another one passes and no sir again!
    And after a wonderful hour in the blazing sun.
    I got to ride a truck trailing a flipped over car!

    Finally home there’s no place like home!
    It was a trip
    It was a day!!
    And what a freaky way to spend a day!





    Submitted on 2005-07-10 00:19:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think you would have been better writing a story. It is a shame you had a very bad experience. You start like poetry and then into a story.
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by Highland Girl | [ Reply to This ]
      Is this a poem?

    It's almost like a journal entry broken in a failed poetic form. This needs a lot of work. What's wrong with you? Tarek! You write such interesting pieces!I remember your Quater to 25.
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]



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