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    dots Submission Name: Love Blossomdots
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    Author: Traveller
    ASL Info:    43/Male/Alaska
    Elite Ratio:    5.33 - 59/46/7
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1125
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    Bytes: 587



    Description:
       This poem was my first real attempt at a love poem with meaning. I was going through difficulties with my now ex. I had a girlfriend after our seperation that went back to her own life and I went back to my ex. I desire honest opinions, whether the words are soft or harsh.


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    dotsLove Blossomdots
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    Love, like a flower, must bloom
    to bring about new life.
    But, as the flower has a winter cycle,
    love must fade away to grow.

    As bitter-sweet love fades,
    Like a wilting flower,
    anew grows love's budding blossom
    to greet the coming sun.

    Where my heart must go
    I'll see in days to come
    for the falling of it's petals
    are scattered to and fro.

    Two wilting flowers
    their seed passed in the wind
    pause for one sweet moment
    to begin their life again.




    Submitted on 2005-07-10 01:23:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This reminds me of a first love. The bittersweetness of all the new feelings. And the longings. But those usually don't last forever.

    You described here how one love can wilt, yet to be replaced with another so much more beautiful. Like two souls becoming one.

    This was very beautiful, especially for a first attempt. But then again, true love does strange things to us, and I think that it was love that did the writing.

    The only thing wrong, and I'm crazy about spelling, is your spelled "their" wrong.

    Otherwise, this was perfect. Another fave on my list.

    Brightest Blessings,
    Crystal
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by lenotoire | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the use of flowers and plants in this poem to describe love (i too have used flowers to describe things) i feel this an effective way to express something!
    one line that threw me a little however -
    'a new grows love's budding blossom'
    little bit tongue tied with this.
    it's true that love has to fade and die a little to make way for new love to grow in its place.
    It's amazing how you can connect two things, in this case love and nature, together and the fit so perfectly in similarity.
    great stuff
    cally xxx
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by callycat | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, how timely that i rread this poem. I am at that stage where i have seen the petals scatter and now I move on to grow my new seed at hopes of new life and love.

    Your imagery using nature and the sex within flowers is a fantastic metaphor for what we must go through to move on. You made it sound less painful than it is, which is always good in my opinion.

    Thank you for the piece.
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by Shahdin | [ Reply to This ]
      for your first attempt at writing a serious love poem I say Great job. Omy goodness, the wording is masterful! Its so- I know any can relate to this piece. I was mesmerized after reading just your peom description. I hope this gets many views. It will be an honor to put this piece in my favs. Ive been a member of this site for a while now and to get added to my favs :) thats a big deal :)

    Impressed, Lolavie
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by lolavie | [ Reply to This ]


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