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    dots Submission Name: longing for youdots
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    Author: sword stalker
    ASL Info:    18/female/home
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 27/27/16
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 749
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 587



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       this is just what i'm feelin at the moment,feel free to totally crush it...


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    dots longing for youdots
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    I canít help but feel betrayed,
    But my heart still longs for you,
    I still remember the pain you put me through,
    But I canít help but miss you,
    I told myself too often,
    That I would never love again,
    Yet here I am, still wanting you,
    Still longing for your touch,
    Now you want me back,
    And I still want you,
    But I canít bring myself to say that I love you too,
    I may have said mean things to you,
    But not a word was true,
    And even though Iím with him,
    My heart still longs for youÖ




    Submitted on 2005-07-10 06:39:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very sad and heartbreaking. But you are feeding the emotions, not letting the reader figure it out for themselves. Try being a little more abstract, maybe. Use words in a way that even confuses yourself. Good write, thanks for sharing your pain.
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by Adaria | [ Reply to This ]


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