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    dots Submission Name: 69dots
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    Author: Midnight_Rose
    ASL Info:    18//Male//Chicago, IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 121/149/40
    Words: 591
    Class/Type: Story/Childrens
    Total Views: 461
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 4072



    Description:
       This a poem/story that I wrote around the middle of my sophmore year. I think you all will enjoy it


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    She walked a path filled with memories
    From the ground under her bare feet
    To the dancing trees in the wind,
    But where was she going?
    She traveled alone
    With memories growing more vivid.
    Grotesque images flashed in her head
    Like a bad vibe suddenly filling the air
    A scream sounding in the air
    Brought her to a halt.
    A chilling wind blew
    And darkness crept into the sky.
    Fear ran through her veins
    And she grew cold.
    She continued her path
    Growing more afraid.
    She stopped again
    In front of a house,
    Deteriorated,
    Covered in a shadow of pain.
    The wind screaming the screams
    Of the dead.
    She yelled and cried.
    Covering her ears,
    Closing her eyes.
    It didn't die away.
    The voices haunted her
    Every single one
    Of them.
    She stood in front of that house,
    That diabolical house,
    Filled with tears, sorrow, and
    Absorbed violence.
    She could of ran!
    She could have gotten away!
    But, she was invited inside
    And her curiosity took the welcome.
    Up the creaky steps
    She walked.
    Opening the door
    Surrounded by Darkness.
    The floor screamed
    And the ceiling bled.
    Each step cut her dying skin
    Every breath was choked.
    In the corner of the shadows,
    A stairway.
    Her heart raced
    As she climbed the stairs.
    Guided by innocence,
    She walked one step at a time
    Climbing to the top
    To a room.
    Her soul immobilized by fear
    And her hands hesitant.
    She turned the rusty knob
    And entered into the room
    With a cripple soul caused by
    The sight of blood stained sheets,
    Pictures and articles filling the room.
    Pictures of mutilated children.
    She was too afraid to speak
    Too scared to cry.
    A video camera,
    Standing at the foot of the bed,
    Showed her sights far too gruesome
    For mortal eyes.
    Blood
    Covering a small girl
    Laid down, bruised and mutilated
    And rested on the bed.
    A man walked to her.
    Hiding his face,
    He forces himself in-between her legs.
    She screamed for mercy
    "For the love of God, STOP!"
    But they were only empty words
    That could not be heard
    By him.
    He moaned
    And she screamed
    And screamed
    And...
    She turned off the camera
    Her spirit tortured by images
    Of this brutal ritual.
    Collapsing to the floor,
    She cried to a savior.
    "Christ can't save what's already dead"
    Up from the floor,
    She arose.
    Welcomed by a figure in the shadows.
    Could it be him?
    No it couldn't be!
    But it was.
    He stood above her
    With a grin on his face.
    She froze and stood in silence.
    "Scream, no one can hear you"
    Before she could run
    He grabbed her by her hair
    And kept her in bondage
    On the bed.
    She watched
    The camera watching her every move.
    Watching her
    Kick and struggled for escape.
    He sat
    With his legs across he chest.
    He held a knife in his hand
    And ran it down from her arm,
    To her hand,
    Down to her virgin lips.
    The pain sank into her skin
    As tears tolled down her face.
    He grinned,
    Spread her wide,
    Rubbed the blood between her thighs,
    And pushed himself inside
    Until her came inside of her.
    Naked, she laid.
    Cut and degraded.
    Putting her life to an end,
    He sliced her throat.
    One look in her eyes
    Made him smile again.
    He carved in her breast
    Captured in a picture,
    A "6"was on her left breast
    A "9" was on her right.




    Submitted on 2005-07-10 11:22:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well a little shady but it was really kool. I liked it. It had a good storyl line and a good ending. But creepy it gives me shivers down my spine.


    Fana
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my. Yikes. I love it.
    So descriptive in such a sick way.
    I got to admit, when I started reading this, I didn't expect it to hold my attention. Most of the longer stuff doesn't, but this definitely did.
    Like a car accident (I swear I mean that as a compliment ) It was sort of hard to look at, but I couldn't look away.
    You have a lot of talent.

    Wonderfully done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Marc, This is my absolute favorite poem you've ever written so far this will DEFINATLY be on my favorite list it's like your with her as she goes through everything...Lesa
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by taintedrose16 | [ Reply to This ]
      Of course I am happy that you posted this. This is my favorite poem of them all. I know that I have told you this many times but you are my favorite poet. The imagery of this poem is amazing. You are telling the story and I feel as if I am there. I am walking along with your victim, I walk alongside her, I feel her fears and I feel the cold on my feet as I walk with her. I agree with brokensmile when I read 69 I felt as if I was watching the story come to life. As I have stated before your poems always make me change my perspective on life. You are such a unique individual. A free spirit that will never be broken. Keep being an individual. Never change.
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]
      ill admit the first time i read this it scared me, lol, but after reading it a couple more times, its like hauntingly good...its dark, but then again its light at the same time...good job love!
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by BrownEyedBeauty | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i loved you can imagine this as you read. was it a dream or just a thought i dont care the point is that this was awesome and it probablly took alot of emotion i really loved it
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]
      The imagery in this piece was really powerful. It basically was like watchiing a horror movie. it was a bit long- some things were a little drawn out, my favorite part was the end ~ it wrapped everything up and captured my attention( im not a rapist either)lol. the only thing id change or would add to would be the title - it dosnt really give anyone the right idea of wht they might be reading.
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by brokensmile | [ Reply to This ]



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