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    dots Submission Name: It's like this Paindots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsIt's like this Paindots
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    It's like poison blades
    digging deep into my skin
    it's like you use to love me
    but I guess I could have been wrong

    It's like a bad trip
    you don't want me anymore
    evil words sprung from your hate
    I wish I was hallucinating

    But I know I'm not

    This is real
    I know this is it
    I thought we could try, I thought we could pretend to be something that resembles happy

    I hate the pain
    I don't know how to be numb
    I don't know how to belong to anyone but you
    I don't know how to pretend to hate you when I don't

    I don't know why we are here again
    but there isn't anything that can make it go away
    it's too late
    how can you say that you regret saying goodbye
    how can I let you




    Submitted on 2005-07-10 16:20:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "I don't know how to pretend to hate you when I don't"

    this line is emotionally crying ../. it sounds like the poem here at hand ./. is very breaking: with a (who was) sanifacant other .../ i love the way you ended the poem it made me just wanting more and more / keep up the good work.
    JWI
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooo I could feel a lot of emotion in this one. I know exactly what it's like, and it's horrible, but at least great poetry comes out of it. Although I love the whole thing, my favorite part was:

    "I hate the pain
    I don't know how to be numb
    I don't know how to belong to anyone but you
    I don't know how to pretend to hate you when I don't"

    That definitely stuck out the most for me. I could feel every line as I read it. The wording was excellent. I hope everything works out for you. Great job :-)

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      hey,
    i really enjoyed the depth of this poem. i dont know you so im not goin to judge you on rythm or anything. great and touching poem....i have been there one to many time before ...stay strong.
    love and death:
    razogirl
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by Razorgirl | [ Reply to This ]


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