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    dots Submission Name: Spark Spidersdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSpark Spidersdots

    I see spark-spiders
    glowing in the night sky,
    burning like temporary stars,
    falling like flaming rain
    to the dull earth below.
    Perhaps the wind will pick the embers up,
    and push them back into the sky
    before they fade like ancient, extinguished gaslights.

    Submitted on 2004-01-08 12:22:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Kind of cool! I like this one! Short and sweet!. This was wrote very well and I would like to read some more of your stuff.
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the spider illustration for fireworks and it's glow that shines on objects below. I also like the smell of the gunpower or whatever that is especially on 4th of july when its real thick. this brings back some fond memories. favorite two lines "Burning like temporary stars Falling like flaming rain" nice visual read, mike
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      At first I thought shooting star with this but then I couldnt get that to fit spider sparps. Now I see fireworks exploding! Yep that works for me.
    Put me right back into a memory of bonfire night!


    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm digging deep down today! "spark spiders" is a great name for fireworks (i assume that's what you are referring to here). "falling like flaming rain" is a great image. i'll think of spark spiders now when i see fireworks in the future!
    | Posted on 2004-12-04 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      mmm... I can't decide if you mean fireworks, or the sparks that jump up out of a really good bonfire... Either one works beautifully, and the language is a pleasure to read. Well done! <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-19 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      I've decided to look over the things you posted oh so long ago, and unlike all others i thought Fireflies when I saw this...odd of me. O.o Oh well though, its lovely, I think I'm going to be making my way slowly through your archive of talent, m'lady. Excellent stuff. ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2004-04-27 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]

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