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    dots Submission Name: Omnipotence Disappointingdots
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    Author: Catalist
    ASL Info:    27/M/MN
    Elite Ratio:    5.05 - 20/18/10
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1149
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    Bytes: 779



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       (My first post, the dog picture was found on google, comment liberally :)

    What if you could suddenly know and do anything, except change the minds of others? Or if you had enough money to buy anything except trust... Or if you found love with/from as many beautiful people as you wanted, but realized you were never satisfied, always looking for someone new... It would likely bring us to the realization that our personal problems are always within ourselves, that we are always alone and empty, from a certain perspective, and that our perspective becomes more important than our influence.



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    What to do, & what to think if anything...

    knowledge before bliss, we can accept this

    a power not in the Fist but almost endless

    potential, by lacking any limit

    For what now can I wish...

    To fly, but why to mock a bird
    when first and second conflict with third?
    an opened eye to see the herd
    from outside the line's sharp not blurred

    to be undead, to rest in dread
    to wonder at the subject's head
    from black and white to bloody red
    contradicting what was said

    again and with a certain word
    of meaning that's so powerful
    like halfway true and half absurd
    and teasingly suggesting worth




    Submitted on 2005-07-10 19:56:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This title got my attention. I didn't quite know what it meant, but I gather that it means "Inadequate power" or " Influence that is unsatisfactory" or something in that line. The freestyling I don't quite grasp, but for some reason I think it works. I'm not sure I understand all that is being said... but a lot ties in with what I understand of the title.

    The rhyme works yet again as in the other work, but it works better here.

    I like the way you think.

    k

    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by K | [ Reply to This ]
      dam... you used words in that i could never even put into place... that was an amazing piece... i dont know the whole meaning but i think i understand enough to enjoy it... thanks alot, that was truyly an awsome write.
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by Solemn Star 88 | [ Reply to This ]


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