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    dots Submission Name: sleeping with youdots
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    Author: darkonesgirl
    ASL Info:    21/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 233/245/125
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 891
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1124



    Description:
       if you read up on my jernales you will see i met a guy and i spent the night in his arms as you can tell obvoiusely something else happened lol anyways hope you like the poem


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    dotssleeping with youdots
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    Lying here next to you
    I can see the world go by
    Watching the flowers bloom
    The sunrise
    The leaves turn colors
    And the snowfall silently on the ground

    Kissing your soft lips
    Laying here in the dark
    Wrapped tightly in your arms
    As you touch away
    All my problems
    Thereís no where else Iíd rather be

    Falling asleep with you last night
    Was the best time of my life
    Enjoying every minute
    Wishing them to last forever
    Knowing I will wake up
    And you will still be here

    Your tender touch
    On my delicate body
    Send shivers
    Across my fair skin
    And loving your lips
    As they slide over my breast

    A few days have past
    Not yet a good nights sleep
    Since that night together
    Missing your touch
    As never before
    Wishing for you tonight

    Iím ready to open
    The next chapter
    In this so called life
    Wanting to stay
    Safely by your side
    Till eternity we see




    Submitted on 2005-07-10 21:12:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey kristen i loved this its is really beautiful, and touching. im glad that you found someone like that for yourself. this poem is now a new fave of mine keep it up girl...bw how are ya doing its been awhile since we last talked...take care Joy
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      This really was beautiful...made me think of my boyfriend! I think you captured the feeling of being with someone, falling asleep in their arms, and wanting to stay that way forever. Really good write...brought a smile to me face! Thanks! ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-07-11 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      *tear* beautiful....I'm happy that someone is in love...and write great poetry about it...some light imagery creates lovely surface feeling throughout my body....I hope your love lasts long and is as beautiful as this poem.

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    | Posted on 2005-07-11 00:00:00 | by reveries | [ Reply to This ]
      aww man, that was awsome, i loved the whole thing.. its really great to have a love so good, for me ive been unblessed with the unfortune of having no luck finding sum 1, for my fiance left me the other day, for another guy... so all i can do is look back and read excellent poems like this 1... keep up the good work
    aj
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by Solemn Star 88 | [ Reply to This ]


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