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    dots Submission Name: To the transgressordots
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    Author: K
    ASL Info:    26/Namibia/Africa
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 183/172/46
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsTo the transgressordots
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    Oh yearning soul
    When will thee be at ease?
    When will thee seek forgiveness for all thou transgressions?

    When night falls on yonder
    Thou cannot help but wonder; more ponder
    What will befall thee next?

    Thee hast been neither fruitful nor infertile
    But yet, there are so many thorns on thy path
    Why hast though not chosen the easier of all
    No, thou seeketh the path of wrath

    When will thee accept that thou be lost
    That all thou doors be shut
    In the morrow there lives new hope
    If thou hast only trust

    But the inequity of thy deeds
    Exceedingly shies away thou good intentions
    All the bitter and torment that thou hast sowed
    Thou must now accept the barren fruit of thy seeds

    Though thee be unfilled and without warmth
    Even thy manservant be the same
    There is more for thee than can be seen by the eyes of man
    For it is not revealed to those that be unjust in their intent

    Repent ye thy transgressions
    For He that forgives is greater than any man
    He will not let those that are chaste of heart
    Be likened to those that are consumed by guilt

    He will cleanse thy spirit
    Wash it with the living waters
    Why do thee live as one that be dead?
    When ye know that thee will live as one, forever




    Submitted on 2005-07-11 05:37:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      When I saw 'thee' and 'thou' in the first section, I was taken aback but then when I read it as if it were from the bible or something, it became glorious in its truth and beautiful in its flow, thank you. Only the word 'smut' convinces me that it's not divinely inspired lol, i wonder if it would sound better to me 'guilt.'
    | Posted on 2005-07-11 00:00:00 | by Catalist | [ Reply to This ]
      Hello Shakepswere :P I didn't find anything that interrptud the flow, maybe cause i like it from the start to the end = D. Words like thee and thou gave it a very special touch.
    On the last line, could it be more effective with "will live as one(,) forever"
    Write On...
    | Posted on 2005-07-11 00:00:00 | by Depdem | [ Reply to This ]


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