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    dots Submission Name: Nature of Freedomdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 633
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    Description:
       We took a day from work and had a picnic at the Consumnes River ~ just wonderful! I wrote this for a co-worker and his wife that let us use their beach @ the river and home.

    Love,Peace,Joy!!!


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    dotsNature of Freedomdots
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    What shall we
    make of the day?
    Will we wallow in work
    or joyfully play?
    When the wind whispers
    what does it say?
    The river is waiting,
    pointing the way.
    The trees are waving
    as they sway ~~
    Beauty is freedom
    there's no need to pay.
    Lift up your heart
    and thankfully pray!




    Submitted on 2005-07-11 11:41:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi Tiff, I came to thank you for liking my prayer, and find this one! (maybe it's pray day?)
    I love this little poem, it's simple, clean and bright.
    You don't need big long words to be happy!
    Very nicely done.
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-07-11 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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