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    dots Submission Name: Come Home Soondots
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    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 667
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 781



    Description:
       Missing my boyfriend, needing him here, can't wait to be in his arms again!


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    dotsCome Home Soondots
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    Under this skin,
    A shattered heart,
    That's only whole,
    when you're here by my side.
    I love, I wait, I pray for your return
    So please my baby, come home soon.

    I pretend to be strong.
    I put on this face.
    But in my eyes reveal the lie,
    That I'm weak, I'm broken, I'm falling apart.
    So please my baby, come home soon.

    I know you will come,
    As soon as you can.
    But seconds are hours,
    My tears never end...
    Need your body next to mine,
    A moment that is ours forever in time.
    Don't linger, don't wait, just return to our love.
    My life, my strength is all that you are
    So please my baby, come home soon.




    Submitted on 2005-07-11 16:50:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      DEEP...but it's [censored] awesome...i agree with magnolia steele...it would be cute to put in a hallmark card...keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by poeticstorm | [ Reply to This ]
      Talk about DEEP. This is great. The flow did not compliment the depht and sweetness of this poem. This has the makings for a Hallmark card! Great Job.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-07-11 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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