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Jackie


Author: star_on_fire22
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this is just a poem about my best friend. i helped her with a lot and she helped me. its just my thanks to her.


Jackie



my days were masked by dark clouds,
but than,
just like the sun,
you brightened my days,
you made me feel as if there was something to live for
you are always by myside
through the bad times and the good
when you were going through bad times,
i let you cry on my shoulder,
and when i needed reasurance that i should not slice my wrist
you were there for me.
when everyone else left me behind as they excelled in life,
you stayed with me.
i may never know why you choose to stay.
but i must say i am gateful for you
without you i may be dead.
you are the best friend i could ever ask for.
and i hope we stay just the way we are until the end of time.
thank you, Jackie.




Submitted on 2005-07-11 20:10:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very sweet and moving. I hope you stay blessed with such a good friend. I think you did a good job. It's hard to get the right flow for a personalized poem, but you did okay.
Maggie
| Posted on 2005-07-11 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, that's awesome, my friend wrote me a poem like this for helping her stop cutting herself. This is much greater, I'm sure your friend will be touched from reading this, I know I was from my friends poem, it meaned alot to me. Anyways this was really good, the grammar was kind of distracting from the poetic picture. If you take care of that, I'm sure it would be ever better.

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| Posted on 2005-07-11 00:00:00 | by Abort_Chaotic | [ Reply to This ]


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