Description: This might not be anyone's cup of tea (or plate of meat). It was written about the same time as the tribute for my wife, and it's my wrestling with the balance of spiritual and physical love.
It's hard to pinpoint just one of the feelings I see in this piece. You showed me fear and uncertainty, but somehow love as well. It's hard to explain, but I see a beautiful array of color with this, and though I can't put it in to words, I do understand it. Wonderful job on the rhyming through the first and second stanzas, and I like how it changed in the third. Well done, I hope to read all of your works eventually, because all that I've seen I've enjoyed.
I think you did a good job in writing this. Very descriptive and inviting to the readers imagination. I'm not sure exactly what reaction you were going for, but it gave me a dreamy sense of wonder feeling. Good work. LeAnna
I read your description, and still had trouble understanding it. You can use words poetically, but the poem itself does not tell you a theme for what the reader is reading. Good use of imagery though. Maggie