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    dots Submission Name: Thoughtsdots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 665
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       This is how I get every time I'm near Flip. My body goes crazy, and makes it so that I can't think of anything but being with him. This actually came from one day over at my friend's house. He came in and sat down beside me, and I completely forgot why I was there. All i could see was his hands and that damn silver cross.

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    Cross and uncross my legs
    It's uncomfortable to sit here beside you
    I inhale the scent of your skin
    No-one could want you like I do
    I look at the silver chain gleaming against your neck
    And wish it was dangling in my face
    I want to have you now, inside of me
    Don't want to forget the way you taste
    I think of taking you home with me
    You throwing me down on the bed
    Ripping off each others clothes
    But we're sitting here instead
    Cross and uncross my legs
    What I'm doing here, I forget
    I can't think of anything but fucking you
    Sitting beside you is making me wet.

    Submitted on 2005-07-12 12:32:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is like jean-claude obsession
    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      NICE! Very cool and twisted in the end. At first it looks like more of a relationship thing and then comes the twist in the end. That little part of someone you need to experience to get them off your mind. Alot of ppl feel that, and you expressed it well in this write. Very good and keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by ceestyl | [ Reply to This ]

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