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    dots Submission Name: secret lovedots

    Author: ariadne
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 99/85/26
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotssecret lovedots

    There was a boy
    without a clue
    but when the time comes
    he値l know what to do
    there値l be a woman
    he値l become a man
    alone in the forest
    walking hand in hand

    once there was innocence
    once there was fun
    one stroll in the forest
    and all that was done
    the trees were inviting
    they should have ran
    alone in the forest
    walking hand in hand

    after a while
    they値l come to make vows
    first pagan rituals
    then christian bows
    they値l have a secret
    they値l have a plan
    alone in the forest
    walking hand in hand

    then comes the mob scenes
    the stones and the sticks
    accused by the sinners
    and alcoholics
    they wont be ashamed
    and will make a stand
    just to be dead in the forest
    buried hand in hand

    Submitted on 2005-07-12 14:10:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i love this. the hand in hand line that was strung through the entire poem was strong. i'm not completely sure what this poem was about. but i saw it as about a hidden homosexuality issue. i'm not sure though.
    i really liked the line
    "once there was innocence
    once there was fun
    one stroll in the forest
    and all that was done"
    the word innocence just fitted so well. this is really nicely written.
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by denial | [ Reply to This ]

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