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    dots Submission Name: To You From Me...Part 2dots
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    Author: deathbelow
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 34/43/17
    Words: 286
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
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       This is my reply to my youngerself writing to me...I try to explain why I am like I am....I realize that I still have the younger me inside and I can try to be more like that


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    dotsTo You From Me...Part 2dots
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    Dear You,
    It isn't as easy as it seems,
    You haven't seen all the things I've seen
    What are you? I'd say about 4?
    My life, our life, has gone through so much more,
    Mommy and Daddy haven't started fighting have they yet?
    There is worse to come I bet,
    You have never fallen in love, have your heart broken, all you do is cry and cry,
    Have you ever wanted to die?
    I have felt regret
    Thats one thing I wish I had never met
    I have no more time for laughing or playing
    Not that I dont want to but, I am just saying:
    When you grow up, you will see,
    It's not so easy as it seems to be
    Responsibility is one word you should know
    Responsibility is the one who makes me so,
    It's not fun to imagine anymore
    There is no such thing as dreams, thats what reality is for,
    I can't crawl to mommy to help everytime I cry,
    They told me when I go into the world I will need to stand on my own 2 feet or I will die,
    So you see, I can't be the me I used to be,
    I long to be happy like you
    But as I said It's not so easy to do
    I'm sorry, so sorry I can never be anything more
    I'm afraid thats what this life has set me up for
    I'm sorry that I've dissapointed you, Younger- self,
    I can't be somebody else
    Take your little hand into mine,
    I'll try to look for you, but I'm not sure what I'll find,
    I'll try to show you the part of you I can be
    Love Always,
    Me




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    ||| Comments |||
      Yes...uh huh thanks for that feedback to your other poem. I was hoping part two would be like this because it's like your sitting down with a four year old telling them that their parents are about to get divorced. You are explaining to your younger self why you are the way you are. How life has affected and changed you. How you've been living in the real world. I loved it as much as i loved the first one and i hope to read more.
    Much love and support,
    Danni
    | Posted on 2005-10-09 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]


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