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    dots Submission Name: Culturedots

    Author: Oracle
    ASL Info:    24/ F /NY
    Elite Ratio:    4.63 - 423/313/46
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Born into a culture that’s worldwide emulated and simultaneously hated
    Stolen from a rich heritage of proud people
    Even the smartest, some debated
    To be brought to a place corrupt and evil
    On bended knees we built an empire
    Bullied and hazed we slowly flamed America’s fire
    Mournful songs--- secret passages held
    About Harriet’s Passage--- the way so many fled

    From bloodied backs and broken necks
    We’ve risen
    From battered spirits and raped women
    We’ve risen
    They tried to take our lives
    But we’ve surely survived

    And now…

    We take global positions, from the White House to your house
    Television, radio
    From Oprah to Tom Joyner’s Show

    We’ve taken over

    No longer accepted by many of our
    Deep ancestral history bearers
    And hated by those who stole us
    We create a new home

    We are the millions, a new race that is
    Strong enough to acknowledge what we are,
    Accept what we come from and
    Applaud where we are going

    We dance, sing, politic and make the world stand up and notice…
    We are African American’s
    We have taken the worst; made it the best and now they imitate us.

    This is my culture.

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      I really love the emotional strength here, the pride, dignity and resilience. I like the pacing and the meter here (it almost reads like rap, not that I'm familiar with it but it does seem to have that sort of cadence to it). A fave.


    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      *applauds*great pride and strong points well delivered and leaves the reader as to no doubt what you are about and how proud you are of your culture,i take my hat off to you.Delivered at a good pace powerful wordings to express yourself,in particular the line
    "We have taken the worst; made it the best and now they imitate us."
    so true when you think about it
    | Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by gd66uk | [ Reply to This ]
      The power you wrote in this was so exilerating!

    I know that I should not be giving pity or be sorry for you. I won't cause I don't feel that way. I feel proud for you. Keep on writing.

    Ja Matte!
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by akaietowa-ru_18 | [ Reply to This ]
      I see you couldnt resist the old "us and them"

    Whilst I appreciate most of your thoughts in this, and whilst I'm proud of the forward move of humanity over the years, don't expect me to feel guilty for somehting I had nothing to do with.

    And don't tell me you've taken over, I think you've a long way to go yet, you're doing ok, though.

    Sorry, You seem to want some sort of retribution

    Be Happy
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is pretty damn good, and damn true as well. i could feel the pride and grit and determination, as well as sorrow and pain. in the end though...triumphant isn't it? it was really well written, and true to your culture. It made me feel...i don't know..sort of ashamed? but i liked it nontheless...growing up poor as hell, and being on my own since 16, i've had to work my ass off to survive, but thats not anything compared to what the African American race went through. Good on ya. good write. take care. thats a good pic you got there too...

    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm...good point. A strong sense of pride in this write. I think thats the powerful beauty in this piece, the pride for who you are. The meaning behind this could resound through any culture...white, europeans, asians, latins...anyone and everyone can feel these same sentiments. You may have been speaking of just one culture, but you have touched so many with this and that is strength in itself. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Oooers...stand strong, and preach it. I loved this poem a lot. It is a seriously classed poem, because not a lot of people see it. Well, they do, but they son't take it seriously. I love the second to last stanza, where you talked bout how we took the worst, and made it best, and also talked about how people imitate us. I thought it was wonderfully written. My favorite line was the first line of the first stanza, which was very powerful, and hard-hitting. I really loved it, and as an African American myself, I appreciated it. Thanks very much. Awesome job.
    Peace and love,
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      To be so proud of your culture. I admire you for that. My daughter is biracial and I have been learning as much as I can about my background and my daughter's father's background. As much about Puerto Rican, Caucasian, and African American Heritage. You can find many interesting things. Many things that some don't want you to know.

    This was a great write. Very strong!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]

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