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    dots Submission Name: I Feel:::IAMdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 577
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 382



    Description:
       I don't know - it's hot and my air conditioning went out! HOT HEAD! he he he

    Love,Peace,Joy!!!


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    dotsI Feel:::IAMdots
    -------------------------------------------


    I feel the great
    Love of Ages
    &
    I hear the wisdom
    Whisphered by Sages
    &
    I breathe every word
    as I Turn the Pages
    &
    My heart is as the
    Animals Confined to Cages
    &
    This life seems so vile
    with All of its Rages
    Yet, Experience pays the sum
    of Our Wages...




    Submitted on 2005-07-12 17:09:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Great how you wrote this. And I loved how you used the same rhythmic rhyme at the end of each phrase. I love it when more then just two lines rhyme. It proves more of the writer.

    Which this has proven here...you have pure talent!

    Great write!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i thought this was really nice. great rhyming which gave it a nice flow.:-). i liked these lines inparticular too...
    "I hear the wisdom
    Whisphered by Sages
    &
    I breathe every word
    as I Turn the Pages"


    so yes this was a very nice piece!

    brenna
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey,
    I think this was a good poem
    You had a good sense of rhythm
    The word choice was pretty good
    And over all I liked the emotion in the poem
    I like the use of the And symbols
    I agree with DQ =p
    It wasn’t professional, but hey
    No one is a true professional at this stuff
    Nice talking to ya.
    Good Job,
    Big Bill-
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]


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