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    dots Submission Name: I Feel:::IAMdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 570
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       I don't know - it's hot and my air conditioning went out! HOT HEAD! he he he


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    dotsI Feel:::IAMdots

    I feel the great
    Love of Ages
    I hear the wisdom
    Whisphered by Sages
    I breathe every word
    as I Turn the Pages
    My heart is as the
    Animals Confined to Cages
    This life seems so vile
    with All of its Rages
    Yet, Experience pays the sum
    of Our Wages...

    Submitted on 2005-07-12 17:09:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      Great how you wrote this. And I loved how you used the same rhythmic rhyme at the end of each phrase. I love it when more then just two lines rhyme. It proves more of the writer.

    Which this has proven here...you have pure talent!

    Great write!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i thought this was really nice. great rhyming which gave it a nice flow.:-). i liked these lines inparticular too...
    "I hear the wisdom
    Whisphered by Sages
    I breathe every word
    as I Turn the Pages"

    so yes this was a very nice piece!

    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
    I think this was a good poem
    You had a good sense of rhythm
    The word choice was pretty good
    And over all I liked the emotion in the poem
    I like the use of the And symbols
    I agree with DQ =p
    It wasn’t professional, but hey
    No one is a true professional at this stuff
    Nice talking to ya.
    Good Job,
    Big Bill-
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]

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