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Author:	rocknpoetrychik
ASL Info:	20/Female/Someplace
Elite Ratio:	4.06 - 331/281/44
Words:	60

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	261
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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this might not be the best of my poems.. you might hate it.. you may not understand it.. but this frees me of my thoughts and feelings that bind me. so appreciate that at least. thanks
~*~amber~*~

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Inconvenient,
Not worth my time.
Socially stupid,
Do you know a line?
Frustrated,
I want to berate you!
Angry,
I fucking hate you!
Lie,
This is not how I feel.
Lie, Lie,
Do you know what this is?
Lie, Lie, Lie,
Living in a dream.
I lay here.
I lie here.
I move on.
I live.

Submitted on 2005-07-12 23:29:50 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i understand this poem all to well but the only thing i have wrong with it is that the words you use should be more extreme show more of a true anger and more or less seriousness of the moment yoiuare trying to put the reader through.
good write
Ace
| Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]
  When I read this I imagined someone throwing paint at a canvas. I liked it. I don't know if I know what it means, so I wont offer any interpretation. "Frustrated"
is misspelled. I don't know if this was intended. Tell me what the piece means, if you don't mind. I would like to know. Take care.
| Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
  its got true passion and emotion.thats all a poem needs. doesnt have to be perfect format just the right rhyme, it just needs to be true nothing fake and thats what you accomplished here good job

just business
dylanpoe
| Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
  i like the passion in it.
i would like the key to it.
more of an explantion.
its funny i got both of the same pictures as steele and kid. that great.
also it kind of reminded me of high school.
bad relationships, people who you just need to get rid of.
tell me what it ment to you. you can pm if you wanf.
snuff
| Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by snufthepunk28 | [ Reply to This ]
  is this about some guy giving youa pick up line?

Anyway, I liked it. Simple yet deep. I liked the last stanza the best, tied it all in together just right.

Indigo
| Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]
  I may be wrong, but it sounds like you are tired of pretending to be something you are not. You are not accepted and that makes you angry. And you are not in a position to speak your mind to the person...like authority figure, maybe a parent? Well, I liked the poem very much. I liked the way you built up the word lie in a climax at the end. Good work.
Maggie
| Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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