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    dots Submission Name: Conversation with Goddots
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    Author: vedanta19
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 492/502/133
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 369
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       Yesterday, when travelling by a train, I watched the landscape. I wondered at the colours of nature/people and this poem came to my mind. Posting it the way it came to me. Let me know, how do you feel about it. All your comments are most welcome, as always :)


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    dotsConversation with Goddots
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    Tonight, Dear God -
    I ask some questions;

    Not about - Why my heart cries through my eyes,
    Or, whether I was enough,
    Nothing like that, I promise;

    I ask simple questions -

    Why earth is brown?
    And rocks are black;

    Why the sky is grey?
    And sea is blue;

    Why sun is yellow?
    And leaf is green;

    Why wind has no colour?
    Yet, feels so very pink;

    Why are you so bias to a rainbow?
    And flowers mostly single-shaded;

    Why death, the metaphor for freedom, so dark?
    And life so very red;

    Why men with money have sleepless nights?
    And poor sleep soundly on dirty road;

    Why the equipped travellers complain of cold in north?
    And child in tatters, serve hot tea, smilingly;

    Why orphan cries to a mother, for a mother?
    And a lonely mother counts days in an old age home;

    And if you are in good mood -
    Answer me - Why my soul cries in warm red
    And flows in colourless cold tears?

    Tonight, Dear God -
    I ask simple questions.





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      the line about the wind feeling so very pink made me smile... i liked the lines about death being black and life being so filled with red. sorry i cant comment properly today, im a bit out of it
    laura-grace
    | Posted on 2005-11-20 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
      There is alot of things deep within us that we truly do not understand and have no answers for. There is nothing wrong with asking God these questions, for he is your Father and you his child. A very good write and outpouring of ones soul...
    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      THIS POEM IS BASED ON HONESTY OF THE SOUL . IT'S COMPLETLY IN THE NORM TO ASK GOS WHY. BUT THERE WILL COME A DAY WHEN WE WILL ALL KNOW ALL THERE IS TO KNOW...IF WE KNOW HIM.

    A VERY SWEET AND INNOCENT ARRAY OF QUESTIONS FOR GOD. GREAT WORK!
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
      damn man, that was just really really deep..its
    amazing how well you put it all together, just everything is WOW...the stanzas,, and the questions were so true and heart-felt...i have many times tried to write something to god like this and yet your words are so very beautiful in this...thank you very much...for writing this...here is my best wishes and luck...bye
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this poem. It had a nice flow, and although I'm not a fan of blank verse, I still liked this one. I like your stuff. Keep going!
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by Roberto Santos | [ Reply to This ]
      wow..i liked it...it was so...simple yet deep..this had such a nice flow, and was an enjoyable read. great write...this is a definate fave!
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by FadedSilence | [ Reply to This ]



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