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    dots Submission Name: not your supermandots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 355
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
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    dotsnot your supermandots
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    I'm not tripping
    you can't stand when Iím starting to get better
    You most like it when I get bitter and act like a quitter.
    You lie and cheat over and over to bring me down
    I don't know why you want to do that
    Is it because you don't think about yourself being as a carrying, beautiful woman I see.
    But I hate the way you treat me and the way you act so here goes my rant.

    Stay down bitch and listen to this beat
    All you are is old penny that I lost on the street, I guess I can call you a penny from know on since thatís how you cost to the people of state.

    After all I did for you
    the day I get sent away you spread yours legs the separate way, for every different day there was a different guy, for every different guy there was a different disease. I aint tripping though
    I can get a different hoe.
    That jumps on my dick
    straight from the hips
    and cuts to the chase
    but you never know when you will get to taste something like this again.

    You wanted me to be your superman
    forget it, I don't save shit like you
    I drop you off in the garbage can
    I leave it to the garbage man take care of you
    I don't deal with shit like you
    donít worry the garbage man is a nice man
    His name is Stan
    Stan is your biggest fan, but just watch out he just a repeated sex offender
    "ooh no" he found another hoe.
    I think he is thinking your as slutty as Sharon stone.
    don't try to bring me down anymore.
    It's over Don't get in my way you can't stop me.
    I can complete any task climb up any mountain, drop a multiple platinum cd even though Iím white. Nothing you can do can get me to trip.
    But one I day I will love you
    but till then keep your drunks ass on that ground




    Submitted on 2005-07-13 08:25:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That was tight... kinda reminds me of somethin Eminem would write. I think alot of it came from umm... The eminem show CD didnt it. ya know stan, superman, ect. Well.. anywayz that waz cool. good Job!
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      That was tight... kinda reminds me of somethin Eminem would write. I think alot of it came from umm... The eminem show CD didnt it. Well.. anywayz that waz cool. good Job!
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      it wandered. a lot. is it a song err what? Although it wandered it kept me glued to it to the end. it was very unique and in a weird way enjoyable
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by I want dark | [ Reply to This ]
      lol was that an ode to eminem??? lol whatever it was it was good. i like anything with the same words and issues that he has, it was real not caught up in a bunch of [censored] that most people try to bring to the table. diffrent and nice good job
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      well, this would be a very long song, there is a lot of hate coming through and that is ok, it is very clear that you are pissed off at your now ex-girlfriend, it sucks when people pull this kind of crap just because you go away for a while and then when you come back they try to say sorry and that they will never do it again, good for you in the song you just tell her to stay away and you get over her, but it might be taking it a little far by forcing her to stay on the "ground", i think it would be best if you just stay away from each other.

    ~liz~
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]


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