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    dots Submission Name: The Dirty Worddots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       I just started thinking about how I can never say no to him last night, and this is what came of it. And like I say in the poem, I don't really wan to say no, anyway. It just pisses me off when he says no to me.


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    I want to say no, but I can't
    And I never could
    But I think I'm lying, if I wanted to say it
    I'm pretty sure I would
    No is a word that you and I
    Have never really used
    No is just a dirty word
    That you now abuse
    No is what you say to me
    When I tell you what I wanna do
    No is what I really should say
    When I open my eyes and see that its you
    No is that one word
    That you've never heard from my lips
    You cover them with kisses before they can say it
    Run your hands down my hips
    Do I want to say no, because I can't
    Though I know I should
    But fuck all that, I'm not gonna say it
    The sex is too damn good.




    Submitted on 2005-07-13 08:41:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      y is sex so nasty for some ppl? it is a beautiful natural act of love, or lust, or w/e it is they have going on between 2 ppl...and it feels good...well anywho...i think this was a pretty good poem, i thought the twist of making no the dirty word was rele good, cuz u know how ppl r usually so interested in sex( and then cover it up by saying its gross or something) and so u drew them in with that and then surprized them by making no the dirty word. now, i do have to say it wasnt the most interesting poem ive ever read, but i mean it wasnt bad or anything. kewl tho, ok, peace out

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    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by ilikescreaming | [ Reply to This ]
      I was getting the feeling that this was one of those poems where someone loves someone to much to let them go, but the ending changed that thought. It was pretty good and you wrote the idea of this poem very well. I comend you on a job well done! ^_^
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]
      lol, you [censored]...this was great, and though I cringed at the running down of the hips it was still clean enough to read, this was an awesome concept though...making NO the dirty word.CLever Clever.
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Great poem! Yeah I guess when you really want it, it is hard saying no, but the way you put in your poetry makes me smile. :)
    Good Good
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by Roberto Santos | [ Reply to This ]


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