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    dots Submission Name: Extraordinarydots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I was thinking last night how could he possibly leave me for someone as bitter and hateful and so damn ordinary as Tanya. And then I just thought maybe he couldn't handle an extraordinary woman, that he needed someone "normal." But, hey, it's really his loss, and I honestly think he's finally beginning to realize what he's done.


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    dotsExtraordinarydots
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    I was extraordinary
    And you were extraordinarily self-absorbed
    And my love made me blind to that
    It was something I chose to ignore
    Then suddenly you were gone
    Back to some flame from your past
    And I thought she must be something special
    If those feelings for her could last
    I met her, and she's really not
    She's normal versus my outstanding
    She's conniving and she's selfish
    She is far too demanding
    I was different and I was innocent
    And I could always make you smile
    You gave me a special purpose
    And we were happy for a while
    Then you left me for her
    It's something that I can't figure out
    What coudl make her so very special
    That you'd turn our world inside out?
    I was so very extraordinary
    And you just were not
    And in loving you, that special part of me
    Was something I nearly forgot.




    Submitted on 2005-07-13 08:57:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it...and no you aren't over confident...these people should meet TOny and Tonya...I mean Tony could have pretended to be special but Tonya...well there is just no hope for that girl, and you are the coolest.

    As for the poem I think this was a really good subject to write about...you are taking every angle you can and you are making this awesome poetry out of it...see that's what I am jealous of...you THINK about it, anything I write is just thoughts...yours is deeper.
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok...Let me start by saying that I read your journal and I read this poem and I feel like I need to yell at you! You should never let a man do this to you! He is only in control because YOU let him be in control! You need to have more respect for yourself! Why in the world would you want someone who treats you like this? And to leave you for someone else? Come on...do you ever want to be happy? Do you really think he is gonna make you happy? Kick him to the curb! Geez, there are a million men out there and you deserve one that will treat you right! His behavior will continue as long as you allow it to! You need to stand up for yourself! Go find someone else and forget him, he clearly ain't worth it. Sorry I ranted at you but you shouldn't let someone treat you this way! Now, about the poem: You did a nice job putting your feelings into words. One spelling mistake in the 19th line, otherwise well done!
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      maybe a little to self confident but hey nothing wrong with keeping your head up because there are enough people in this world to put you down with pleasure. i liked the whole fact that you keep sayin hes the one missing out. ive made a mistake like that before and now its to late to correct it. i used to think about that everyday when i would wake up and talk to someone else, and honestly being single is better than being with her. and im sure thats the way he would feel if this "thing" didnt work it, but whatever you do dont give in to him good job

    Just Business
    DylanPoe
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]


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