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Author:	patrick o_riley
ASL Info:	16, male, ontario
Elite Ratio:	3.94 - 70/91/25
Words:	80

Class/Type:	Poetry/Happy
Total Views:	981
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	486

Description:
its kinda short for my stuff but i didn't fell like writing a long one and i thougt i potraied what i wanted to say.

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A lable is just a stupid name,
created by those who are "cool".
But really who is now to blame,
maby just some old fool.

when people are labled it changese there life,
for good bad or who knows.
some now have no chances at a good life,
well i guss it shows.

A lable is just a stupid name,
but no one should really care.
but really there should be no one to blame,
so take that,there.

Submitted on 2005-07-13 14:29:03 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I know what you mean here...in your defense to Yclipse you were just trying to get across a point here...well that's what I see, and you did that well, so you reached your goal and you should be no less than proud.
| Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
  Needs a lot of work, grammar and spelling wise, but I liked it...It was raw, and straight to the point. Good job!

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| Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by Yclipse | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought it was a cute poem. Definitely need to work on the grammar, though. ;). lol just for starters, "lable" as you spelled it is spelled "label". Otherwise, it was very clear as to what you were trying to get across and enjoyable to the reader. Keep writing, my friend.
Caitlin
| Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by lorn_strixx | [ Reply to This ]
  hey welcome someone from ontario i am in toronto nice to see someone else from canada aye ha ha
this was good well done
great write and enjoyable read
sandman
| Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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