my first impression of this was wow, it sounds like my writing somewhat and its depressing. the cutting part i can relate to i used to do that alot and its addicting. sometimes you just do it to do it and for no other reason.
your poem has a good flow but was thrown off a little bit. it has alot of feeling and if this is about your life just know that there are other people out there who feel the same way. x0x0x0muchlove-ash
Hey! Saw your name in the shoutbox so stopped by as you suggested. =] I like the rhyme scheme, it shows that you thought through the poem instead of writing whatever comes to mind.
I guess this particular line is where the flow seems to break up a bit: "Stuck in a detergent commercial." It's a bit longer than all your other lines syllabically, and I'm wondering- stuck in a detergent commercial eh? You mean one of those bears that are included in the Charmin/Downy[i forgot the names] commercials? xP Or were you seriously in a detergent commercial? Hehe.
"I cut to feel / But everything is alright" These two lines are lacking- perhaps give them just a bit more detail. You cut to feel... then how/why is everything "alright"? And I have a feeling it should be "all right." Hm someone check me up on this.
First impressssions- a depressing kind of poem. The cutting part is scary. It's a common type of poem, but I also like the get to the point style. Nice read! Come back to it in a year or two and give it a total makeover. You'll surprise yourself with how much it'll change. =]