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    dots Submission Name: Teenage Dramadots
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    Author: Roguex
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.61 - 49/52/17
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 657
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1416



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       Heres another try for a song i think this one is decent.


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    dotsTeenage Dramadots
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    Verse 1

    Things were going good,
    Things were going fine,
    You never thought,
    That you would cross the line,
    People always say,
    People always preach,
    But you never listened,
    But they were just trying to teach,
    Of what they have seen
    And what they have done
    They just dont want
    To see you on the run.
    ,

    Now your in too far,
    Your way over your head,
    If you dont turn around,
    You will soon be dead,

    All those drugs your doing,
    You thought you would be cool,
    But they just made you mess up,
    And now your quiting school.

    Chorus

    Times are dark
    And times are scary
    And all you can do
    Is sit there and be weary
    You asked your friends,
    You asked you momma
    But all this is,
    Is a Teenage Drama

    Verse 2

    Then one day you met a guy,
    You loved him with all your heart,
    You gave him everything,
    And he left you at the start.
    Untill that day,
    When you found out,
    He left you more than you had thought

    Now your sitting there,
    Feeding your child,
    You never thought it would be like this,
    You thought things would be wild.

    Chorus Repeat

    Chorus Repeat




    Submitted on 2005-07-13 18:28:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      As long as there are teenagers, there will be drama...so im sure everyone can relate in some way to this poem. You kept it simple and at times blunt which makes it great.
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by Mahoganii | [ Reply to This ]
      well, it lacks artistic merit and is a juxtaposition of histrionic and garrulous comments. Another subject would be good.
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by YoungWerther | [ Reply to This ]
      Its ok. I defintely would say its a teenage lilfe. Its always happening. Drugs, achohol, rumors. All kinds of stuff. TO me I think growing up is the hardest thing in life. To go through so much, I mean parents say they been through the same stuff. But the years have changed. Everything is a higher percent.

    There is one thing in these lyrics that I felt that didn't belong. Or simple I just didn't like.

    People always say,
    People always preach,
    But you never listened,
    And you though life just was a beach,


    I think that was a really forced with the rhyming. I think most of the rhyming was a llittle forced. But that was forced most.
    Maybe you should try lyrics without rhyming one time and see which way you like better.

    Stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, it's exactly like teenage drama. I can definitely hear it as a song. You've seem to have written it as something you've expreienced before. I hope things are well if it is. But again great job, I like it's simplicity.
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by lmen | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...sad...very teenage drama!1 this is gonna have to be one of my favorites! that is just sad...wow...thankx for the good read!

    -Suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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