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    dots Submission Name: The soul behind the liesdots
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    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 747
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 598



    Description:
       This is just me hurting..horribly...but hiding it...having others think they know..but they have no idea..and how I pray they never will. thanks for reading!


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    dotsThe soul behind the liesdots
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    Nobody knows,
    The soul behind the lies.
    Hide my face with hands,
    That used to hold yours.
    Bury the pain with a smile,
    Meant only for you.
    Laugh to pretend,
    That my heart isn't breaking.
    Walls of life crumbling down,
    One at a time, slowly, teasing me,
    Like I'm not supposed to see,
    The pleasure upon their face,
    Of watching me fall apart.
    Broken, but I act whole.
    Pity in their eyes, but they will never know
    The hurt behind mine.
    Nobody knows,
    The soul behind the lies.




    Submitted on 2005-07-13 18:32:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    “Nobody knows,
    The soul behind the lies”

    Starting with these lines and ending with them was great.” Pity in their eyes, But they will never know “consider breaking it up, like:

    Pity in their eyes,
    But they will never know

    And I can’t choose a favorite line because I love all of it, and I know what you're going through, (or went through since it's an old poem) I mean we're both teens, I feel like this all the time, hiding from people who says they feel sympathy with you when they really can't because they don't know what you're going through in the first place!!
    Anyway , great write , keep it up .

    ~~Drakoniss~~

    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it !I like the title the most and how you ended it with the title i did that in one of my poems byebye poetry. The only thing i didnt really get was laugh to pretend? please check out one of my poems please and review it!
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by Brat05 | [ Reply to This ]
      I am wondering why no one commented on this one. Perhaps to close to home I suppose. It is striking.I love the line
    "Laugh to pretend,
    That my heart isn't breaking."
    Even though it doesnt come in the beginning, it is the heartbeat of the poem. If you will it is 'the soul behind the lies' A definite fav!
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by Tarwen Nevle | [ Reply to This ]


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