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    dots Submission Name: Favorite Time of Nightdots
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    Author: playcrackthesky
    ASL Info:    21/f/IA
    Elite Ratio:    4.46 - 463/457/88
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsFavorite Time of Nightdots
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    My favorite time of night
    Is when you find yourself in me
    Brush your fingers ever so close
    Tilt my head back , let the sighs escape.

    Watch your eyes flutter open
    When the light disintegrates
    Catch me falling from your high
    Push your hand down, scream my name.

    Iím slipping faster
    To find me here
    By your side and I say,
    I could never let you go.

    Clutch the sheets
    As Iím grasping you,
    Hold on so tight
    Iím falling through.

    Now sprawled out
    For me to see,
    Play around the locks
    That lay upon me.

    Whisper silently,
    I could never let you go.




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      This is a great poem! You have captured this moment beautifully with style and taste! Very sensual and sexy without sounding trashy which isnt easy to do! I would have to say that this is my favorite time of night too! I love how you ended this one too! Those last two lines are perfect! Nice poem! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      hee, hee. I just love night, don't you? This is such a sensual piece...I'm afraid I'm one of those people who busts out the "gory" details. I don't think there's anything wrong with sexuality. You do a very classy job with this though, it's really good. I want it to be night again!
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem was very sensual without being crude. the simple use of words with great imagination and imagery gives this poem a lasting feeling long after finished reading. you have a beautiful soul and a gentle hand with words, i'm glad to have read this one.
    | Posted on 2005-07-17 00:00:00 | by onepieces | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...i cant believe you're 15 and you wrote something so, well, sexual. it seems like something a 20 year old would write. but whatever i guess, cuz it was good, and i could definitely relate to it. i've alwyas wished i could express the nights i have with my boyfriend in words, but it never works out for me, but you did a great job. also, nice username. brand new rocks my socks off...and nice guitar too. looks like a fender, right? they're my favorite. you officially rock.
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by xvacantxskiesx | [ Reply to This ]
      THis was wonderful. Seems like it kind of ended abruptly, but that really doesn't hurt the piece itself. There is a time of night that the most sensual emotions come out. In the dark, all that exists is the person and your love.

    This was awesome!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ohhhhhh ! ...I got so lost in this ...I really didnt want it to end ...but seeing as it had to end ...I thought the last line was perfect...This was just so sweet and romantic ...I can't say anything against it ....Well done
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      15? a little young to be experiencing "this time of night"? *taps fingers* uhhhh HUH. ok, that aside...this was a great write. i like how you didnt drop your standards to write about this. i cant stand the people who just give a gory description about their last lay. just no dignity to it. good imagery, and way to go.
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by brokenroses | [ Reply to This ]
      You DID do a great job with writing this. it was sexual, sensual, and written with class. that is pretty damn good. Yeah, i really did like this, but i can't seem to find any more words to say. your picture is badass...you're playing a D minor..correct? i've been playing for about 7-8 years. it's fun, i love rockin out. take care
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to agree with Hyproglo. You did an great job writing this. You had my attention the whole way through.
    Good job.

    Rain
    ~good times go hand in hand with good nights!
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      Thats my favorite time of night too, Ha! What great stimulating emotions flow through this write. I liked it and you did a good job writing this. I think all feel this time of night just as you do. Cool beans man. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...I really liked this write, I agree with practically everyone else on here about how you got your emotions across without being crude...I really liked the rhythm of this one too...Great Job, Keep at it...
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by t0_eazy | [ Reply to This ]


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