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    dots Submission Name: Lonely (Not For Me)dots
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    Author: DeadGod
    ASL Info:    20/M/OR
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 61/103/31
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 802
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    Description:
       Just wrote this tonight. About a girl I know who misses someone else... the same way I miss her.


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    dotsLonely (Not For Me)dots
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    And how, I wonder
    Did she know
    The blues-

    And purples-

    In the sky;

    The colors
    Dripping
    Down
    The silvered canvas
    As I turned my back to run?

    In her black
    Amid white linen
    Opening her eyes
    And thinking:
    When he comes,
    Will I know to smile
    When I see
    The whites of his eyes?

    Or will that have been too late?

    Pale, lavender questions
    At night.

    Sometimes I wish
    She was not alone.

    Sometimes
    She wishes
    She was.




    Submitted on 2005-07-14 02:22:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! This was twisty and turny here! I loved the way you finished it! That really made my eyes pop open. The description in this added so much to the meaning of this. Just the littlest details really gave this poem a punch.

    You showed a unique talent with this. Be proud of this one!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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