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    dots Submission Name: The Valley of Serenitydots
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    Author: Tarek Refaat
    ASL Info:    24/m/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 370/508/212
    Words: 288
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Valley of Serenitydots
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    The Valley of Serenity

    Ice formed snow..
    Snow covered the mountains..
    And when summer came..
    The snow melt to run a stream
    Down into the veins of the valley..
    Sending the life into this place
    Rendering the white valley
    Into a flowering blooming spot..

    Animals.. would wander ..
    Birds would sing..
    And life would breath out..
    Such a simple place
    With such beauty in its place..
    And when I walk at my own pace
    I sit and observe all this ..
    The flowers.. the smooth and cool soft green grass..
    My hands reaching down to the earth…
    Being one with nature..
    From the dirt which I come from ..
    From the soil of which I was created..

    The sounds of the winds echoing through my ears..
    The mountains around me sending those vibes
    That enchant my very existence..
    Like a perfect maestro who knows his tune..
    And knows how to conduct all that surround him
    The sounds coming from the trees and leaves..
    All in a perfect harmony

    And when you take a step into the river..
    You can feel the shiver running up your spine
    Up slow and so gentle you feel you’re being reborn..
    Goosebumps all over my skin..
    As I look at my hand..
    And then look at the reflection of my own image
    Through the crystal water..
    Its all the place
    Its all the vibes.
    That take our souls to these adventures divine..
    Eyes closed I wash my face..
    And as the droplets slide down my cheeks
    It all feels so relaxing to the limit..
    Like all your wounds healing..

    This is my place..
    This is where I belong..
    Inside the valley..
    The Valley of serenity





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    ||| Comments |||
      The imagery, as already said, is superb. I could see the valley nestled in the mountains. Beautiful. The poem flows wonderfully, and the wording was perfect. Great write. Ciao.
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so peaceful and calm. I like the imagery. It makes a change for you not to show fear of aggression. I liked it very much.
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by Highland Girl | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW. Your imagery was amazing. I could almost see it, and it put me at ease. Calming, soothing...it's a beautiful peace.
    Not a cry in agony. A new flavour on my tastebuds. :)

    Jaymi
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the way you separate the forming of the valley to the feel of it and then the music that it holds. Over all you had a really nice orginization.
    I wish this place exsisted...
    I would be good to finally feel at peace...
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]



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