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    dots Submission Name: Hearted Inkdots
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    Author: Munchie_1226
    ASL Info:    25/F/E.STL
    Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 1831/1834/185
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1228
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       I'm in my own world right now!


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    dotsHearted Inkdots
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    Sometimes I say things,
    That I donít really mean.
    But I push the bad aside,
    And choose the good things to be seen.

    At times, I act like,
    I really hate who you are.
    I see the path that we've walked,
    And realize we have came so far.

    I present myself occasionally,
    Ways I know could push you away.
    When you listen to my heart,
    Iím begging for you to stay.

    You give me mixed emotions,
    That are so hard to describe.
    And when it comes to these feelings,
    I can no longer hide.

    You are my soul mate,
    My heart tells me itís true.
    Even when Iím with someone else,
    All I can think of is you.

    Just know I will be here,
    Even when times are at their worst.
    I will come running when you call,
    You will always come first.




    Submitted on 2005-07-14 11:20:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beatiful write

    The person you were referring to is gifted to have someone so full of love as there soulmate

    I really enjoyed reading it
    Great Job

    God Bless
    Ron

    Thanks again for your recent comments I always always enjoy hearing from you

    Your positivity reflects on your writes and it is very refreshing
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      At times, I act like,
    I really hate who you are.
    I see the path that we've walked,
    And realize we have came so far.

    is a true description of many people, that have gotten in a relationship and are frustruated because they have put to much into it to let it go its liek spending 5 years training a dog and then just giving him away all that work for nothing.. good little write

    Just know I will be here,
    Even when times are at their worst.
    I will come running when you call,
    You will always come first.

    you summed it up when you wrote this
    no matter what may stretch love it always comes back to where it started
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that it's true when people say you will always remember your first love...I think that your first love will always be your last love..even if you are no longer together...

    I think this is one of you most honest writes...kind of weird to see this honest humble side of you...not weird bad...weird good...i know this side of you...but not very many others do...

    I wish you all the best and happiness you can contain!

    xoxox
    Tay-nah

    :D
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      Starngely I sometimes feel this way about my ex. Like I would do anything for her. Like I don't want to see her hurting. But I won't engage in any thing more than friendship with her. This made me think about her immediatey. I must say this piece is defintitely relatable to me and I am sure to many others as well. Nicely done...

    X
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed reading this. Its honest and emotional. I really enjoyed it. You may be talking about a lover, but people can relate to family wise, or friend wise. Still very meaningful. Sometimes it is hard not to go through what you are going through. But I hope you pass it. I really love reading your work. You honest in all your work.. Truly always meaningful.

    Stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-07-17 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      that was very well written. i'm not much for rhyming schemes usually, but since the whole thing wasnt rhyming it flowed very well and made a nice addition to the poem. i really liked the line about looking down the path you've walked...it reminds me of what my boyfriend and me have gone through, and its really inspiring because when you actually look back and realize how far you've come, you appreciate the love even more. i really enjoyed this and i guess i dont have any criticism for you!
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by xvacantxskiesx | [ Reply to This ]
      *cries* ....You just described stuff thats going on with me right now ...and that always helps someone to connect with a poem obviously ....But this is really smooth ...and the honesty spills from it like wine ...Your poetry always shows your heart...jam packed with love and emotion ...that makes all you write ...just that much more real ...Well Done
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      For lack of a better word, Wow. I applaud you seriously. You moved me, it inspired me. Totally made me want to love you. I totally related to every single word typed. Such emotion made me just totally fall for each drop of expression given. Just wow.props
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by lmen | [ Reply to This ]
      Well isnt this just the ultimate poem to/for the estranged. It was smooth and the first two lines...how often does that happen, ya know? Very straightforward and honest. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a genuinely honest piece that illustrated the things we often do in relationships with someone we really love but sometimes don't always show/say.
    It shows your human. I liked, "I present myself occasionally,
    Ways I know could push you away.
    When you listen to my heart,
    Iím begging for you to stay."
    Good job girl!
    Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      the feeling and emotion is nice,
    but the word repitition takes away from the feel of the piece.
    the first stanza started out amazingly, but it sounded kind of forced after that, maybe if the rhyming went freely it would stick better throughout the entire piece.
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by fallingingreen | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwww. ;) This is so sweet. This is a really good piece. Introspective and honest. I really hope you've found someone with whom you can be yourself w/o fear, and I hope you control the urge to say things to push him (or her-it's a new era after all :) ) away. Great job w/ this.
    J
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by bentnotbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice poem! Truly heartfelt and romantic to the core! Very sad too though as if you love someone sooo much, shouldn't you be with that person? Anyway, lots of emotion and feeling with this. A true sense of the word "commitment" with the irony that you dont have a commitment to this person! Very nice write!
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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