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    dots Submission Name: Wonderzdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       Spent the day at the river just appreciating all of nature.


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    I saw and I became:

    The Golden Sunset
    peeking behind
    the trees of ancient powers

    The speckled butterfly
    art in movement
    loving the flowers

    The six strong
    flock of patterned

    The beach of sand,
    rocks and

    The sunlit leaves
    of growing trees

    The black and yellow
    of the bees

    The forceful current
    and undertow

    The lapping waves of
    ebb and flow

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      Your connection w/ nature in this piece is awesome. You do a great job showing the majestic beauty of the natural world and your place in it. I don't know why but this makes me think of the eastern philosophies. The serenity of the piece is almost metaphysical. great job.
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by bentnotbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha, yet another love,peace,joy poem by you. Is this what kind of genre you write? Haha, I like this one yet again, it doesn't make me think of smileys and pink puffy clouds, I think of nature and it's elegant beauty, thanks. This piece was great.

    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by Abort_Chaotic | [ Reply to This ]

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