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    dots Submission Name: Illuminateddots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 676
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 319



    Description:
       Love,Peace,Joy!!!


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    dotsIlluminateddots
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    As the sun sets
    it's life and
    light are a lamp
    within me
    to shine upon
    the shadows of darkness...
    As the currents
    white crest
    will continue to flow
    Onward...
    So shall I go
    Unafraid
    With an infinite
    warmth
    inherent.




    Submitted on 2005-07-14 13:38:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The current's white crest = a rushing river, illuminated by the sun as the sun slowly falls from the sky. The light fades into darkness. You are strong. You can cope. You have warmth

    You painted my mind with things not yet seen in movies!

    HEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!

    Awesomely LEET poem of...
    of...
    SUNSET IN THE RIVER DARK!

    I love it
    You love it
    We all love it
    This poem
    Is like
    Ice Cream!
    Cold and freezy
    But nice and gooey melty tasty!
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      I got a feeling of a cleansing. The washing of the light that gives you a renewed inner strength and rejuvination of your soul.
    It actually gave me religeous visions of the Lord's Light washing away sin and giving that peace that you can face anything. Following the new path of Illumination. I love the title and the work. Smiles
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by Traveller | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiffany this short verse left me feeling so at peace. It is as you inhaled and exhaled your surroundings and then put it into written expression. Your imagery in this was exceptional. `Always write poetry, Cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      "Illuminated".. what an excellent title for this piece. Even your discription fits. One can feel love, peace, joy, while reading from line to line.
    I really like that even after the sun sets you can still feel it's illuminating rays warming you throughout. A very lovely read. Thanks, ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      i think you may want a comma after sets,...
    As the sun sets,
    its light and
    light are a lamp
    within me..

    beautiful Tiffany. i love the "infinite warmth inherent". you seem to always take in the beauty around you and use it to its fullest potential within yourself, if that makes any sense..!
    brava!
    @ Cat
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      This has a nice rhythm, good open verse. It reminds me of my girlfriend, whihc is always a good thing (as if I need to be reminded) anyway, this is nice, not too clichéed. Interestingly short, but stil pretty decent.

    Storm
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by OrionsStorm | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, Tiff, great rhythm in this lovely little piece.

    I can interpret it in several ways, too, it's very inspirational, and I like your symbolisms. You're showing your talent again!

    Very nicely done

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey long time no see very nice verse once again
    i really appeciated to no you value my posts and they make your day
    great piece and very enjoyable read
    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, this is so awesome, I kind of feel this way about a girl I know! Lol, this is awesome, truley awesome, it's so new and your style is amazing at this. Hahaha, I don't know, I usually don't like prose like these, but you know, I like this one alot. Great Job

    Abort
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by Abort_Chaotic | [ Reply to This ]


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