As the sun sets
it's life and
light are a lamp
within me
to shine upon
the shadows of darkness...
As the currents
white crest
will continue to flow
Onward...
So shall I go
Unafraid
With an infinite
warmth
inherent.
The current's white crest = a rushing river, illuminated by the sun as the sun slowly falls from the sky. The light fades into darkness. You are strong. You can cope. You have warmth
You painted my mind with things not yet seen in movies!
HEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!
Awesomely LEET poem of... of... SUNSET IN THE RIVER DARK!
I love it You love it We all love it This poem Is like Ice Cream! Cold and freezy But nice and gooey melty tasty!
I got a feeling of a cleansing. The washing of the light that gives you a renewed inner strength and rejuvination of your soul. It actually gave me religeous visions of the Lord's Light washing away sin and giving that peace that you can face anything. Following the new path of Illumination. I love the title and the work. Smiles
Tiffany this short verse left me feeling so at peace. It is as you inhaled and exhaled your surroundings and then put it into written expression. Your imagery in this was exceptional. `Always write poetry, Cheryl.
"Illuminated".. what an excellent title for this piece. Even your discription fits. One can feel love, peace, joy, while reading from line to line. I really like that even after the sun sets you can still feel it's illuminating rays warming you throughout. A very lovely read. Thanks, ~Sandra
i think you may want a comma after sets,... As the sun sets, its light and light are a lamp within me..
beautiful Tiffany. i love the "infinite warmth inherent". you seem to always take in the beauty around you and use it to its fullest potential within yourself, if that makes any sense..! brava! @ Cat
This has a nice rhythm, good open verse. It reminds me of my girlfriend, whihc is always a good thing (as if I need to be reminded) anyway, this is nice, not too clichéed. Interestingly short, but stil pretty decent.
hey long time no see very nice verse once again i really appeciated to no you value my posts and they make your day great piece and very enjoyable read thanx sandman
Ah, this is so awesome, I kind of feel this way about a girl I know! Lol, this is awesome, truley awesome, it's so new and your style is amazing at this. Hahaha, I don't know, I usually don't like prose like these, but you know, I like this one alot. Great Job
Submission Name: Illuminated
