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Author: star_on_fire22
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Class/Type: Poetry /The pain inside
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hmmm... if you can figure out what this is really about than your smart.. or you just know about the ordeal im going through now.


shining bright in the midnight sky
holding witness to a crime
they stare and watch but they can not help
for they are stationary,
immobil, and unstirring.
watching as a girl is being robbed,
robbed of her life,
of her sanity,
of her innocence.
no one else is around to see it.
only the stars and their never ending gazes.
these stars just want to help,
but they don't know how to.
these helpless stars watching as this
young child loses everything.

Submitted on 2005-07-14 19:21:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This feels like the helplessness shared by those who are suffering and those who want to help but don't know how. As for the crime being committed against the innocent, anything that robs us of confidence in those we trust most is a crime. Physical abuse is easy to pinpoint, psychological pain is easier to hide and more difficult to treat. The stars need to do more than watch. Shalom.
| Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
  I have an idea also but dont want to comment on it and dont want it to be true. It came to me very clear but can be interpreted differently also, so as of I now I dont know what its about and hope you will soon reach for the stars..
| Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by ceestyl | [ Reply to This ]
  this is very hard to comment on. i have an idea but it is one of many this poem could be interperated in many ways. i don't want to be wrong and look like a fool, but i don't want to be right because i don't want it to be true. but no matter what the meaning it is obviously very personal and very painful so i'm going to leave it at that and hope that i am wrong.

| Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by misty_of_moon | [ Reply to This ]
  if only the stars could talk what a world of interest they would say. i like this it makes me think about me a bit. the way i interpret it is that noone around you can help you and the people who can you don't know. it's a great write.
| Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by lethargic_me | [ Reply to This ]
  wow i thought this was kind of sad. and i never thought of stars having feelings. which was kind of interesting. but if u think about it stars do see everything and anything but cant say anything about it. this was a good way for me to think.

| Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought it was really quite good. What i like was the fact that is wasn't in first person making the poem relate to many people. I thought the structure of it wasreally good and i liked your ideas. It is a topic that is used quite a bit, but you showed it to us in a different, more comlex way, great work on this peice.
| Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by samyalone | [ Reply to This ]
  I may be wrong, but I think this poem is about the people around you. Your loved ones want to help you but they can't. And the people that CAN help you, can't see you. Tell me if I'm wrong
| Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by HECATE_Sservant | [ Reply to This ]

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