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    dots Submission Name: perfectdots

    Author: samyalone
    ASL Info:    17/f/my room
    Elite Ratio:    3.85 - 93/67/18
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    My anger is a time bomb ready to go off
    It's like this every time you tell me-
    You want me to be like the people on T.V.
    The Barbie dolls with minds of Einstein

    You look through my window like eyes and i know
    I'm not
    You want

    I feel like a butterfly, going backwards, in evolution -
    It may take a while
    But I'll find the fork in the road
    Where the detour didn't work

    I found it, and it was the second I was
    From the warmth of your body.

    Submitted on 2005-07-14 19:58:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ok first let me be very straight that barbie doll with the minds of Einstien kinda left me cold. however not all bad, I really like that butterfly going backward in evolution, that is very cool. From a beautiful butterfly to a caterpillar. a reverse metamorphis I like it! the rest is great too. the anger expressed and captalized letters of stress, good effect. nice write,

    | Posted on 2005-09-14 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      endmypain is write because relationships are always written about and its getting a little blah. but i liked the way this poem was written out. good job. KeLLy
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]
      a relationship gone bad is written about often.i do it myself because it is a great topic with alot of emotion.but the way you wrote it is very odd. but i like it.
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by endmypain | [ Reply to This ]

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