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    dots Submission Name: emptydots

    Author: samyalone
    ASL Info:    17/f/my room
    Elite Ratio:    3.85 - 93/67/18
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       A poem i wrote after my "brother" told me how he was feeling. The I realised, this is how i've felt for over a year now.....

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    Here in the dark I sit,
    an empty shell with no emotion
    anger controls and in my eyes a fire is lit
    I wish i could scream but I can't

    I wish it would stop, all the death around me
    it drives me into insanity as I sit here in the dark
    the door opens and I hope it is that face I see
    but that face is dead and with it my life

    Submitted on 2005-07-14 20:01:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well I happen to really like this poem. It leaves you with a sense of infer what you want, even though there is a clear purpose for it. And so anyways, I like how when you put the word death in it you didn't mean its literal meaning but death inside. A common factor in this world.
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by Lauren Guzman | [ Reply to This ]
      this was short, yet it was good. i liked the choppiness of it and i like that. i also think you need to expand and elaborate some more. other than that good right. good job keep it up! KeLLY
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]
      Death yet there's fire, dark yet there's light... it's just like life. Completely contradictary but it's real. It's short and blunt, I think you should expand and elaborate...
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by HECATE_Sservant | [ Reply to This ]

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