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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2779/1297/258
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       Ray Bradbury wrote a short story about a group of eight-year-old boys fascinated with time travel.When they wanted to visit the past they'd go to the 'time machine,' a hundred year old man who told them stories about a past they could never touch. This poem is based on that story. This one is about two years old and has to do with the disposability of an older generation. Some people find the brakes after hitting the wall.


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    A leaf falls-
    A ray of light
    On a cool October
    Morning knifes
    Into the air
    Lays a pattern
    On the floor…

    A leaf falls-
    Silently, a faint
    Shadow of a
    Passing season
    The days grow
    Colorful as
    Spring flowers
    Briefly
    For no reason

    Time, the
    Mechanical
    Invention of
    The over wise
    Marks nothing
    Means even less
    To the ages
    Mirrored in
    Men’s eyes





















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      hmm says it pretty much. a very interesting thought. it seems unfinished to me, but maybe i have comprehended it wrong but i get the feeling of how much time is a simple disruption of existence but, after all, we live a linear existence and we need time to guide us along our paths to give us challenges and forcing us to set goals to want to be able to defeat it and become what we were born into linear existence to be. but there is always the feeling deep inside what would happen if there was no time and we had all the worlds existence to become what we are? well i'm rambling so good write think on my words a bit.
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by misty_of_moon | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm. i like it. yet im not fully understanding it i liked it. buts that only cuz im a little dense in the head sometimes. good write. KeLLY
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]


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