Description: this title directly coincides with the poem, and when all this took place. it is about a love i no longer have; and that i'm probably living healthier without.
first on halloween -------------------------------------------
my body is a symmetry of twists and tangles
when i'm around you i'm such a molding
of what this should all look like
your face is no longer the stars
nor was it a sparkling object in my mind
just a blurry shape of tans and blacks that intercrossed with our kisses
your skinny arms laced all around
my eyes closed tight constantly darting about
my brains repeating
dizzy dizzy dizzy
stumbling my legs around awkwardly feeling like a drunk
freezing cold when it's over.
we're out and on the sidewalks, racing racing.
kiss me in front of everyone; i wasn't scared.
walked back watching kids in their costumes on pavement running....
my head floated off my shoulders and if for one moment i could have seen clear i would have known.
hmmmmmm sounds like this could be about me skinny arms haha that's just what makes em think it's me I really liked it ambuh I love your oems and I wrote the second part of Child Of The Dark you should chekc it out if u like the first one love you lady
Nice realization of the torsion that develops when desires become overwhelming. It seems to twist the body out of shape and make the mind giddy. It almost sounds like a first true love. Nice primarily because the honesty makes it fresh.
Talk about a lot of symbolism. (I hate that word because it makes me think of school!) But this really does have a lot of symbolic meaning to it. I like the idea of "arms laced all around" as well as "stumbling my legs around". It brings this piece to life in my mind. The last stanze is great. Sort of like a declaration of, screw everyone else I love you, sort of thing. :) The ending line is so powerful. I'm glad you decided to keep it alone. That line could mean you are going to be the death of me in a tramatic kind of way but I think it's more of you'll spend the rest of your life with that person. Just a thought. I loved it! Great job sweetheart! Hugs! <3