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    dots Submission Name: My Eyesdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 808
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       I want to hear what you guys get out of this...I mean I think the setting is pretty clear but any personal interpretation would be great.

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    dotsMy Eyesdots

    I'm dizzy
    I watch everything go by at once
    I reach my hands out to catch my life as I watch it go by
    it's filled with colors
    different shades of black and white
    my head is spinning but I make myself see
    I run my fingers through the grays
    they blurr like I am touching my own dreams
    and I glimpse inside
    I can see my own reflection
    but the eyes I see are different
    the eyes I see are numb and empty
    this is what I have become
    definate colors
    inside they're fading and blurring
    and inside they're numb

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      I think I could interpret this poem several ways. The first thing I thought was someone trying to find themselves but realized they have wasted away. Is that sort of near the point? Great write Jaz. Keep kool.
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      It sounded like an acid trip. Full of imagery and descriptions... If you were going to paint a picture of this, I think it would turn out good. It painted a picture in my mind, even though I am not exactly sure what the message was.
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      lori, this one had a lot of detail that takes some doing to fully understand.i see that you received many views and a few comments.your poem probably was a bit much for the average viewer.you really did very well with this one.i hope to have some time to read more of your writing in the future. SoNNy
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]
      first off / im a kurt junkie myself so thats cool . second my nickname use to be dizzy ... i love the line " it's filled with colors". great poem
    keep writing and posting
    J W I
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...you read this one to me at my house...it just gets better everytime. It was very powerful...Didn't you say you were going to do a painting based on this poem...you should...I think it would turn out great...

    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      That was f*cked up. Now, I'm dizzy. Ha, ha, you didn't spell blur right the first time. You used 2 r's. Who do you think you are, Nelly? That's not cool. I like it though. Definitely leaving it open for interpretation. I'd be so lost if I didn't already hear you say what it was about.
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      thax for yor kind words once again i dont like telling my age but just turned 43 somedays i feel like 100,anyways i liked this post alot of your thoughts i felt as a child into adolescence
    grew up to alot of abuse verbal and physical but never passed it down to siblings i only started writing after a fatal car crash 2 years ago if you check in all the poems you are reading will be in book form published 2006 bad life circumstances its been ready for 1 year and i just keep adding the titles keep it to yourself and enjoy
    great write took me back to life
    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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