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    dots Submission Name: Can You Tell Me Whydots

    Author: Roberto Santos
    ASL Info:    18/Male/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 118/159/75
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 869
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       This is a style that has often been used by poets, and I decided to write a poem which simply asks, "Why?"

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    dotsCan You Tell Me Whydots

    Can you tell me why
    The birds fly in the bright blue sky?
    Can you tell me why
    The newborn baby starts to cry?
    Can you tell me why
    When I look up I see the stars above?
    Can you tell me why
    Peace is shown through the white dove?
    Can you tell me why
    We can never escape our fate?
    Can you tell me why
    Food sometimes tastes so great?
    After all these answer another
    Why canít we learn not to hate each other?

    Submitted on 2005-07-15 12:43:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well roberto this is good, i liked it alot. and to answer the question why can't we all escape our fate, it's because fate is the inevitable no matter what you do to change it it's still going to happen.

    but the last line i don't think anyone can answer
    keep writing
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by lethargic_me | [ Reply to This ]

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