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    dots Submission Name: "Father Kolbe"dots
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    Author: Martin S. Allen
    ASL Info:    33 male
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 671/237/43
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       This is a poem about a priest named Father Kolbe who gave his life for another during the holocaust. I feel like in some ways society has become selfish and this poem is to remind people that great acts of kindess and love can still exist in such a violent world. I plan to revise this piece because i am not fully satisfied with it. I feel it is not descriptive enough. I am currently revising this piece, so in time i'll post the new version.


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    dots"Father Kolbe"dots
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    Born to be a martyr
    To share the gift of love
    Kicked and fifty lashes
    Face down in the mud

    Fed souls starvation
    For enemies pray
    A life to be read
    and also to lay

    To give for another
    A life such as Christs
    A hand to a brother
    That glow in the night

    My poor wife and children
    So frighteningly sobbed
    He stepped in my place
    So life be not robbed

    Can you hear the prayers
    From building thirteen
    With face calm and sweet
    His love can be seen




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      the last stanza really struck me. this is a well-done portrait of a man who lived his faith. i've read a lot of negative stories about the holocaust (including 'the shawl' by cynthia ozick), and it's quite refreshing to read a positive piece.

    peace, love and all that other junk,

    joe
    | Posted on 2007-11-05 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      a fine poem here, commemorating a man who seems something of an embarressment to the modern world that reveres greed and self before everything else. It cannot explain a Maximillian Kolbe who was brave and selfless....again, fine poem.... bravo... bravo.. bravo....
    | Posted on 2007-07-10 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      What can I say brother another great poem. I love the way that you write about stories It is great I have tried to write narritives and I can't even get a good idea, anyway this a great poem and I hope I can develop to be such a writer as yourself.

    much LOVE
    James

    P.S. Hey just thought of something I know that you love music and that you like writings about stories well check out a band called The Decemberist
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
      i admire your writing techinque.. completely.. i love reading what you write. i can not take something that is happening around me, in the world, per se' and write a poem about it.. well one that is any good anyways.. you make the story, the feel- you.. if that makes sense.. :) very good.. and thanks for the story before the peom.. it does help.. but honestly i read the poem before i knew the story and it still grabbed me.. and held... :)
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by Justmenow14 | [ Reply to This ]
      Its a touching subject and well written..i feel like its half finished though. I got to the end and expected a few more lines.
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by edwardgalaxy | [ Reply to This ]
      'He stepped in my place
    So life be not robbed'

    i liked that. i enjoyed your poem. if you're not content with its descriptiveness, go ahead & edit it, because its possible it might not have as much meaning to people without your background information.

    on the other hand, sometimes its fun to leave your reader wondering what the hell you're writing about. it seems i personally make a habit of doing so. haha.

    oh, & thanks for the comment.
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by lovefatal | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem was very well-written and it touched me. It made me think of the times that my mother had gone through hell just to save me from being yelled at by my father and it made me think of all the things that our soldiers in Iraq give up in order to keep this country safe. This is a TRULY inspiring poem. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by RockerRomeo | [ Reply to This ]
      Such a inspiring poem! I wonder if anyone of us has the ability to show as great a love as he? Died, so we all could have that opportunity to live and love better.
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      First off thank you very much for your comments on my poetry i appreciate it your style is very good i did not know right away it was dealing with the holocaust by reading your poetry i get new ideas for a poem thanks again
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW. very moving. i am greatly interested in the holucast and this is a very touching piece. just imagining a man giving up his life to save another is such a great thing. very nice poem. all though maybe it could of been a bit more describtive but tahst about it.
    Ashley
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by star_on_fire22 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really was touched by this and I think that's an admirable thing to do - help remind people of what life really means and I think you're right, a lot of people are very selfish nowdays as they've really been for a long time.
    Great job!
    Love,Peace,Joy! epiphany ; )
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This was quite touching! Without the explanation wouldn't have meant as much. You would have introduce him in some form. But this was well written and moving!

    Welcome to the site! :)

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      ok i have to keep this simple because if not i would be biased, (sorry) this was a well written poem and you supported your theme well, although my agreement is not there, but that has no matter. would like to see more of your poems and see more like this.
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by fallenone | [ Reply to This ]


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