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For A Moment


Author: Emerging Soul
ASL Info:    48/VERY female/Wisconsin
Elite Ratio:    4.36 - 1240 /1114 /244
Words: 82
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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For A Moment




For A Moment
The thought of you
Touches me
Like fingertips
Brushing against my heart
The ghost of your presence
Whispers in my ear
And for a moment
You step into my soul
Then linger there
Like the wetness of a kiss
Upon my cheek
My hand reaches up
To touch the spot
And the memory of you
Fills me
I close my eyes
And drink you in
And for a moment
I am not
Alone







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  it touched me. I like how detailed you described everything. amazing images. very well done.
| Posted on 2004-04-12 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
  This really well-written and the theme is very nice. It reminds me a bit of my poem Pieces of You.
| Posted on 2004-04-12 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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