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    Author: serge
    ASL Info:    17/male/Maine
    Elite Ratio:    6 - 20/12/4
    Words: 385
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Death
    Total Views: 275
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2730



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       my band's lyrics, written by me. Just seeing if they are worthy :) They won't be changed so don't bother giving ideas and such. Your thoughts are appreciated though, like how it made you feel, maybe you can relate, something like that.


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    Live today like there is no tomorrow. Someday you will be right.

    +[H].[a].[p].[p].[y]+

    [Verse.1]

    In reality she never cared
    she was sick of doing everything
    that house...she wished she was never there.
    Raising your parent's family at 15.

    orders came from that man on the couch.
    "Wash this,
    fix that.
    Clean the counters.
    Run my bath."


    [chorus]

    What would make her happy?
    What would make her fine?
    Simply cut out all his organs
    Juxtapose them in a line
    It would make her happy.
    It wouldn't make her cry.
    His pain for hers. like whips and spurs.
    She's gonna be alright.


    [Verse.2]

    Someday she would kill that fucking grouch.
    who liked to bark orders from his precious couch.
    it was all the same, it didnt matter.
    screw gun, broken broom...explosives, BOOM
    whatever made the crimson splatter.
    Hell, she'd stab him with a fucking spoon.
    Was she spineless? Did she dare?
    Next time he hit her, she'd grab his hair.

    She'd smash his drunk ass against the sideboard
    She'd hit him while he was down
    Take that beer bottle to his crown
    slice him up with her new found sword.

    [chorus]x2

    [Verse.3]

    Then one cold and gloomy night,
    dad came home drunk, and she was ready.
    He thought that he would like to fight.
    Her heart was anything but heavy.

    ...one smack, one slap, one punch, one floor.
    He smashed her tiny body against the sideboard.
    He hit her while she was down.
    He took his bottle to her crown.

    Her thoughts were rapid and very jumbled.
    How could she let this happen.
    'How could you do this' she tried to mumble.
    Then slipping out of consciousness, she asked herself...

    [Bridge/Breakdown]x2

    would it have made her happy?
    If it couldn't make her cry then
    would it have made her smile?
    to simply cut out all his organs
    There are none so vile.
    He didn't deserver them.

    It would have made her happy.
    It wouldn't have made her cry.
    His pain for hers. like whips and spurs.
    <i>She would have been alright.</i>

    [Outro]

    SHE WOULD HAVE BEEN ALRIGHT.
    SHE COULD HAVE BEEN JUST FINE.
    HIS PAIN FOR HERS,
    LIKE WHIPS AND SPURS
    She would have been alright..




    Submitted on 2005-07-15 18:08:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This peice is engulfed by so much emotions..It converses the cries of a broken being...it does'nt necessarily refer to a woman, but every other soul who has had an unpleasent encounter with an abusive guardian, parent, stepdad or mom...Its so infurriating and makes you want to grab the "CULPRIT" and squezze out his sense of existance....Its the perfect piece to uplift someone who thinks they are alone.Especially when they are on the verge of embracing SUICIDE..Very well written...Meticulous Piece...very profound!
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by Nobantu | [ Reply to This ]



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