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    dots Submission Name: The way you......dots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 293
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 682
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    dotsThe way you......dots
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    The way your lips taste like sweet strawberries has me craving for more of your sweet lips every time we kiss.

    The way you stare with your beautifull pearl blue eyes into mine, seems to freezes the time.

    The way you walk, I'm supriseds that your not being stalked.

    Girl you me twisted up in the game
    you have my mind in a swirl
    You mean the whole world to me.
    I live, eat and sleep in your name
    no matter how hard things get, I'll be there

    The way you put hair just right
    so it flows like the rythm of rb, makes me want to grab your hand and dance to the remedy under the moonlight.

    The way you look, one look from a nother boy you got them hooked.

    The way you talked, your voice is so sothing it could be a baby's lullybye.

    Girl you me twisted up in the game
    you have my mind in a swirl
    You mean the whole world to me.
    I live, eat and sleep in your name
    no matter how hard things get, I'll be there

    The way you have me dreaming of you being the only one girl elightens me to think she the one I truley love.

    The way you touch me make my mind go to ease.

    the way you smell brings me a scent of 1000 roses like the roses i gave you every day.

    Girl you me twisted up in the game
    you have my mind in a swirl
    You mean the whole world to me.
    I live, eat and sleep in your name
    no matter how hard things get, I'll be there




    Submitted on 2005-07-15 19:13:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      awww thats so sweet. I bet whoever you wrote this for is walking around with a big huge smile on their face.lol. Well... anywayz I liked the words to your song... but I'd have to have a beat to tell you if you'd make it big or not.lol.

    Drea
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      well, this is a love song all right(hate those songs, but o well) there are a few spelling errors that need to be fixed
    beautifull-only one l freezes-freeze a nother -

    no space another sothing-soothing lullybye-
    lullaby

    other then that the song is fine, i can't say that i really like any of the song just because i don't like the type, but someone somewhere loves it so don't worry.

    ~liz~
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]


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