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Death Is His Addiction

Author: Aj
ASL Info:    21/M/MI
Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 102 /110 /29
Words: 181
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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the friend isn't a friend at all...

Death Is His Addiction

it started as a release
to dull the razors edge
now it acts as his crutch
and it hasn't failed him yet

another visit to neverland
a vacation from the pain
no one noticed, no one sees
his life's run down the drain

he hangs he sways he'll never change
his hang man is his friend
he floats he drifts he took the risk
his sweet release until the end

until one day he realized that everyone had left
no dreams, no life, no family the truth he wouldn't except
so he and his friend took one last ride
to see how far they'd get

they didn't get far, and the poor boys heart
deep inside him began to break
unlike his addiction that slowly killed him
these feelings, they weren't fake

he realized his fault far to late
his friend now owns his life
he has no strength to just say no
he's tired, he'd rather die

they once had a good time together
but in return, his friend took his life

Submitted on 2004-04-12 00:31:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  one word: Real.
i think the last verse could have been longer like the other verses but all in all extremly good!
| Posted on 2004-04-12 00:00:00 | by Watchman | [ Reply to This ]
  really scary. and true. really good. loved the title and it just got better by reading the work. Thanks for sharing
| Posted on 2004-04-12 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]

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